Good day,
Would someone who knows what she/he is talking
about please help me make the following paragraph sound better and correct any
grammatical errors it might have. Thanks a lot.
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Being a committed member of Western Association
of Robotics Personnel for three years, I developed outstanding leadership and
teamwork skills that I use on daily basis. During my second year of
participation in FIRST robotics our team won the Greater Toronto Regional with
over 80 teams and went to the National Championship, which was located in
Atlanta, Georgia. By working hard and being dedicated I was promoted to the
head of electrical team. When my teachers heard how interested I
was in engineering they recommended your Engineering Enrichment Program, which I entered with
fascination and enthusiasm. DEEP showed me just
how exciting hands on work may be and Saturday Science Academy inspired me so
much that I feel I will stop at nothing to peruse my dream and get into an exciting
field of engineering.
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