Hi guys,

Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you in advance.

My form teacher is Mr Tan. He teaches us English and mathematics. He is tall and strong. He has short hair. He wears a pair of spectacles.

He is strict during the lessons. That is why all of us pay attention to what he teaches. We are afraid that he will punish us if we are caught not paying attention. He often advises us to study hard so as to do well in the examinations.

When the lesson is almost over, he will ask us if we have any questions to ask. If we have, he will explain to us clearly what we do not know. We like Mr Tan very much.
Veteran Member8,069
Looks fine to me, Yoong Liat
Veteran Member5,006
Proficient Speaker: Users in this role are known to maintain an excellent grasp of the English language. You can only be promoted to this role by the Englishforums team.Retired Moderator: A moderator who has retired.
Strict check is ON! :-)
Note that I am not a native speaker.
Yoong Liat Hi guys,

Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you in advance.

My form teacher is Mr Tan. He teaches us English and mathematics. He is tall and strong. He has short hair. He wears a pair of spectacles glasses(is more common for 1st year students).

He is strict during the lessons. That is why all of us pay attention to what he teaches. We are afraid that he will punish us if we are caught not paying attention. He often advises us to study hard so as to do so that we do(sounds more beautiful) well in the examinations exams(more simple).

When the lesson is almost over, he will ask asks(usually he asks us ...) us if we have any questions to ask(repetition). If we have, he will explain explains(usually he explains) to us clearly what we do not know understand(maybe is better ^_^). We like Mr Tan very much.
Full Member297
Hello Selecter

Thank you for your constructive comments.
A small change... Examinations is probably better for writing. Exams is used in spoken english.
SelecterA small change... Examinations is probably better for writing. Exams is used in spoken english.
I agree. The word in my composition is 'examinations'. 'Exams' is the short form, which is more suitable for informal writing and speech.
Anonymous:
My most unforgettable vacation was the time when i meet my best friend.
He is nice,cute, and good person. He used to it that i am doing good.
He also acts as a father of mine. That's why I'm very lucky to have a best friend like him.

One day I'm worried about him. Because it's almost a month that he never saw me in our home.
I call up into their house, But nobody answered my call. Then later on he's mom went to our home, She told me that my best friend is not around. She also told me that, maybe he could not go back home.

I feel drowned of what he's mother told me. But i can't blame him, we are just friend.
it was a long day's , time had passed. But still i didn't receive any letter or feel he's presence neither.
until the date i was born came, he was their and it was a wonderful gift of mine when he courted me.

Anonymous:
Emotion: dog[K]Emotion: ninja[Emotion: party]Emotion: headbangI love it.
Live chat
Registered users can join here