Short essay

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Hi all, Would somebody please help me with my English?

Regards,

Fizzi

It’s Friday again. As usual, I do not realize the week reach to the end. Too much work and not enough time. Am I too slow? Or I am not really focus on my work? Only me who can give the right answer to this question. I really need to sit, think and deeply analyze what has been happened thorough out the week. I think, I spent too much time on work but with a minimum result. What did I do this week? I when to the library and collected all the advertisements that suitable for my study. I need to collect from three medical journals but I managed to get only one. I will go the library again and collect the rest probably next week. Then, I keyed in all the details in a laptop that I borrowed from the library. (When I borrowed the laptop, the librarian told me not to lose it. “You better keep you eye on this machine mate, If you lose it you have to pay $2800. Sorry mate, It is hard to say, but I got to remind you”). I knew this guy since the first week I am here. He’s a funny guy. He likes to make joke with students. But I took it serious when it came to the laptop issue.

What else did I do? Yes, I looked for a good reference for my next book. I am not sure what is the title going to be. I had one in my mind, but Aini think the title was not “catchy” enough. I agreed with her. Good title will attract readers.
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You need to work on your basic grammar. I highlighted your errors for you.

It’s Friday again. As usual, I do not realize the week reach to the end. Too much work and not enough time. Am I too slow? Or I am not really focus on my work? Only me who can give the right answer to this question. I really need to sit, think and deeply analyze what has been happened thorough out the week. I think, I spent too much time on work but with a minimum result. What did I do this week? I when to the library and collected all the advertisements that suitable for my study. I need to collect ___ (collect what?) from three medical journals but I managed to get only one. I will go the library again and collect the rest probably next week. Then, I keyed in all the details in a laptop that I borrowed from the library. (When I borrowed the laptop, the librarian told me not to lose it. “You better keep you eye on this machine mate, If you lose it you have to pay $2800. Sorry mate, It is hard to say, but I got to remind you”). I knew this guy since the first week I am here. He’s a funny guy. He likes to make jokes with students. But I took it serious when it came to the laptop issue.

What else did I do? Yes, I looked for a good reference for my next book. I am not sure what is the title going to be. I had one in my mind, but Aini think_ (agreement) the title was not “catchy” enough. I agreed with her. Good title will attract readers.
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Hi Julielai or teachers, I have made some corrections based on Julielasi's reply. Would somebody please help me with my English?Regards,
Fizzi

1. As usual, I do not realize the week reached to the end.
I think it should be “has reached/ has come” as it is about change that has happened over a period of unspecified time.

2. Or I am not really focus on my work?
Am I not really focussing on my work? The sentence should starts with “Am I” as it is a question type of sentence. The verb should be “focussing” because it is a present continuos.

3. Only me who can give the right answer to this question.
It should be “Only I”. In this sentence, the writer is the subject in this sentence.

4. I really need to sit, think and deeply analyse what has been happened thorough out the week.
I really need to sit, think and deeply analyse what has been happening throughout the week
It shows that something started in the past and has continued up until now.

5. I think, I spent too much time on work but with a minimum result.
I think, I spent too much time on work but with few results.

6. I when to the library and collected all the advertisements that suitable for my study.
I went to the library and collected all the advertisements that are suitable/appropriate for my study

7. I need to collect ___ (collect what?) from three medical journals but I managed to get only one.
I need to collect advertisements from three medical journals but I managed to get only one.

8. “You better keep you eye on this machine mate..”
“Your”

9. I knew this guy since the first week I am here.
I knew this guy since the first week I was here. ( past simple tense)

10. But I took it serious when it came to the laptop issue.
But I took it seriously when it came to the laptop issue. Seriously is an adverb that modify the verb (took)

11. I am not sure what is the title going to be.
I am not sure what the title is going to be like.

12. I had one in my mind, but Amy think (agreement) the title was not “catchy” enough.
Amy “thinks”

1. As usual, I do not realize the week reached to the end.
I think it should be has reached

3. Only me who can give the right answer to this question.
It should be “Only I”. (Get rid of who)

5. I think, I spent too much time on work but with a minimum result.
I think, I spent too much time on work but with little result.
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Hi Julielai,

Thanks for your help!
Cheers,
Fizzi
You're welcome.
Julielai
1. As usual, I do not realize the week reached to the end.
I think it should be has reached

3. Only me who can give the right answer to this question.
It should be “Only I”. (Get rid of who)

5. I think, I spent too much time on work but with a minimum result.
I think, I spent too much time on work but with little result.
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