short passage

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This passage is meant for year 2 students. Could someone please edit it for me? Any sugestions to improve the passage are welcome.

One day, Tony went to a shopping centre with his parents. It was very crowded there.

Tony saw a toy displayed in the window of one of the shops. He liked it so much that he quickly walked to the shop. After looking at the toy for some time, he turned around to find that his parents were missing. His parents did not know that their son had wandered off by himself. Tony panicked as he could not find his parents. He was soon crying.

A young man saw him crying, and asked him what had happened? “I can’t find my parents,” he explained. “Don’t worry. I’ll help you.”

The young man told him to wait outside the shop with him as he believed his parents would be looking for him. About five minutes later, Tony saw his parents. He was relieved. His mother said, “You made Father and me look high and low for you. We were so worried.”

Tony apologised to his mother and promised her that this would never happen again.

He has learnt his lesson. Nowadays, he stays close to his parents whenever he goes shopping with them.
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Yoong Liat
A young man saw him crying, and asked him what had happened? “I can’t find my parents,” he explained. “Don’t worry. I’ll help you.” (said by whom?)

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Yoong Liat

A young man saw him crying, and asked him what had happened? “I can’t find my parents,” he explained. “Don’t worry. I’ll help you.” (said by whom?)

Not again. A careless mistake - an unnecessary question mark.

Don’t worry. I’ll help you.” (said by whom?)

I deliberately left the speaker out because from the context, it is clear that the speaker was the young man. I hope you agree with what I said.

Anonymous:
This passage is meant for year 2 students. Could someone please edit it for me? Any sugestions to improve the passage are welcome.

One day, Tony went to a shopping centre with his parents. It was very crowded there.

Tony saw a toy displayed in the window of one of the shops. He liked it so much that he quickly walked to the shop. After looking at the toy for some time, he turned around to find that his parents were missing. His parents did not know that their son had wandered off by himself. Tony panicked as he could not find his parents. He was soon crying.

A young man saw him crying, and asked him what had happened? “I can’t find my parents,” he explained. “Don’t worry. I’ll help you.”

The young man told him to wait outside the shop with him as he believed his parents would be looking for him. About five minutes later, Tony saw his parents. He was relieved. His mother said, “You made Father and me look high and low for you. We were so worried.”

Tony apologised to his mother and promised her that this would never happen again.

He has learnt his lesson. Nowadays, he stays close to his parents whenever he goes shopping with them.
Anon

Could you please repost? I've difficulty reading the amended passage.
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