Can someone check my grammar for me?

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Anonymous  #573266  Sun, 05 Oct 08 04:59 AM
Hello, can some check the grammar of the following words below?

I woke up in cold sweat and sat straight up in our bed, and touched the side of my face. It had all been a dream or a nightmare. Moonbeams filtered through our curtains casting a soft light in the room.

My husband lay on his side, snoring blissfully, unaware of my trouble dream. I snuggled close, breathing in his minted fresh breath. My hands ruffled his black hair, and I snuzzled his ear. "I love you." He muttered in his sleep, and tossed one arm around me. Lying back against the pillow, I whispered, "Father, thank you for revealing to me what you want me to know."
  
Anonymous  #573309  Sun, 05 Oct 08 08:13 AM
The only problem that immediately jumps out is 'trouble dream'
'trouble' is a a noun or a verb; you need to use the adjective form.  In this case 'troubling' (the active participle). 
  
Anonymous  #573531  Sun, 05 Oct 08 07:15 PM
Thank You!
  
Anonymous  #573534  Sun, 05 Oct 08 07:22 PM
I forgot to ask about the sentence: My husband lay on his side, snoring blissfully, unaware of my
troubling dream.
I want to know if it is active present tense, if it's how do I change the sentence to
past active tense?
  
Clive  #573600  Mon, 06 Oct 08 12:01 AM
Hi,
I woke up in cold sweat and sat straight up in our bed, and touched the side of my face. It had all been a dream or a nightmare. Moonbeams filtered through our curtains casting a soft light in the room.

My husband lay on his side, snoring blissfully, unaware of my trouble dream. I snuggled close, breathing in his minted fresh breath. My hands ruffled his black hair, and I snuzzled his ear. "I love you." He muttered in his sleep, and tossed one arm around me. Lying back against the pillow, I whispered, "Father, thank you for revealing to me what you want me to know."

Here are a few more edits.

I woke up in a (we usually say 'a', treating 'sweat' as a countable noun that refers to all the sweat on a particular person's body.) cold sweat and sat straight up in our bed, and touched the side of my face. It had all been a dream or a nightmare. Moonbeams filtered through our curtains, casting a soft light in the room.

My husband lay on his side, snoring blissfully, unaware of my troubled dream. I snuggled close, breathing in his minted fresh breath. My hands ruffled his black hair, and I nuzzled his ear. "I love you." He muttered in his sleep, and tossed one arm around me. Lying back against the pillow, I whispered, "Father, thank you for revealing to me what you want me to know."

The sentence 'My husband lay . . .. ' is fine as written.

Best wishes, Clive
  
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