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Anonymous  #517729  Fri, 23 May 08 07:31 AM

Thanks! to whom that correct my grammer mistake. It is bascally about my grandpa passing all i need is a grammer check. The paragraph/story struture don't matter.

            As many of you know, losing a love one is very painful and hard to get through it may takes many months to recover. That is what happened to me, on the day after my High School graduation my Grandpa Khun passed away just days after he attended my graduation. I was shocked when I heard the news about my grandpa passing and I said to myself this can’t be true, because just three days ago my grandpa was in excellent condition he was very active he told lots of jokes at my graduation dinner party and he seem very happy. I can’t believe how a person who has such a strong heart who always exercises never once smoke or drinks and always eating health food can have a heart failure. After my grandpa passed away it had been emotional three months for me throughout my summer vacation. I didn’t have any fun all I think was about my grandpa. Grandpa Khun was, quite simply, a beautiful man inside and out. He was incredibly giving and made huge sacrifices for his family, his wife, his children, and his grandchildren. I often spent holidays with my Grandpa over at his house for Christmas and Thanksgiving he was an excellent cooker and the present that he would give me for my birthday and Christmas is well over what I would expect from him, because the amount of moneys is too much to except from him, but he always said “save up and try not to spend too much at once” he is a generous person . I feel very bad because I never got the chance to said goodbye to him and how much I loved him. Therefore, Take each day like it could be your last, you never know when it is your time to go.

 

  
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Clive  #517811  Fri, 23 May 08 12:25 PM

Hi,

 As many of you know, losing a love done is very painful and hard to get through. It may takes many months to recover. That is what happened to me. My Grandpa Khun passed away just days after he attended my High School graduation. I was shocked when I heard the news, and I said to myself, "This can’t be true, because just three days ago my grandpa was in excellent condition. He was very active. He told lots of jokes at my graduation dinner party and he seemed very happy. I can’t believe how a person who had such a strong heart and who always exercised, never once smoked or drank and always ate healthy food could have heart failure". After my grandpa passed away, it was an emotional three months for me during my summer vacation. I didn’t have any fun. All I thought about was my grandpa. Grandpa Khun was, quite simply, a beautiful man inside and out. He was incredibly giving and made huge sacrifices for his family, his wife, his children, and his grandchildren. I often spent holidays with my Grandpa. I  was over at his house for Christmas and Thanksgiving. He was an excellent cook, and the presents that he would give me for my birthday and Christmas were well over what I would expect from him, because the amount of money was too much to accept from him, but he always said “Save up and try not to spend too much at once”. He was a generous person. I feel very bad because I never got the chance to said goodbye to him and to tell him how much I loved him. Therefore, take each day like it could be your last. You never know when it is your time to go.

Best wishes, Clive

  
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