Can someone help me edit my personal statement

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davidzhaos  #573554  Sun, 05 Oct 08 09:22 PM
 

My mom once told me a story about the lion and the deer. She said on the African grassland the deer mother tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer because if they don't, then they will get eaten by the lion. The lion mother also tells her children when they run, they must run faster than the slowest deer, because if they don’t, then they will not catch any deer and starve to death.
 
This story has taught me a variable lesson: it taught me to always try my hardest because other are trying their as well. This is why during my junior year in high school, I decided to push myself to the limit, to get the best out of myself by taking as many AP classes.
 During my junior year I decided to challenge myself academically by taking as many AP classes I can. I took three AP classes including world history, chemistry and language. These AP classes were all difficult but I wanted push myself to the best of my ability. Of these three classes AP world history was easiest for me because I read a lot of books on history so I had a lot of background information. As result I was able to get A on every single history tests and score a five on the AP exam. AP chemistry was much harder for me, in chemistry I had to work more then any other class I had ever taken. Every night I would start doing chemistry homework at eight and not finish until twelve clock. But during this time I always worked as hard as I can and in the end the result of my hard works was clear; I was able to learn chemistry and score a five on the AP exam. The last AP class I took was AP language. It was my weakest subject. I am was born in China and English was my second language so even my parents weren’t sure if I am ready to take this class. In the end I still decided to take it because I wanted to challenge myself. In that class I had to write one essay every week and write a ten pages research essay for the first semester. In the end I was able to survive it with a b average and a three on the AP exam. It wasn't perfect, but I tried my best and as result I am proud of result.
 Throughout my junior year I always tried my hardest whatever is in school. This is because I know if I tried my best, I will have the greatest chance of succeeding.

  
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