Anonymous  +  322467 Wed, 31 Jan 07 05:07 PM Hi! Could you please tell me if these sentences are correct and clear enough? Some of them are not about medical English but please don’t be mad all of these are from my letter for veterinary medicine school. Thank you very much for your attention and forbearance I completed research investigating influence of training on energy metabolism of the horse’s erythrocyte and its antioxidant system. (or should be - horse erythrocyte?] This is a title and beginning of my letter: ‘It is all because of the love of horses …’ A rewarding career in equine physiology has been my lifetime dream and aspiration. It has always been a goal for me to work with and for one of the most magnificent creatures in the world. –[With this sentence I meant that through my study I will gain knowledge about horse physiology and I will be able to improve the welfare of the wellbeing of these animals, so this way I would work for horses - Am I right?]   Anonymous Medical English

	nona the brit  +  322495 Wed, 31 Jan 07 06:03 PM I don't know about the horses' erythrocyte or horse erythrocyte issue (you probably need someone with a scientific background) but I can tell you that it should the investigating the influence of training... the 'with and for' part makes perfect sense. nona the brit Joined on Wed, Sep 22 2004 England Veteran Member 11,713 The name says it all.

	Feebs11  +  322520 Wed, 31 Jan 07 07:17 PM You could say "equine erythrocytes and antioxidant systems", which might be better in a scientific context. Feebs11 Joined on Thu, Nov 23 2006 UK Veteran Member 5,015

	Sunil Pathiraja  +  322967 Thu, 01 Feb 07 06:29 PM I think you can fine tune the beginning of your letter like this. I completed the reaseach investigating the effects of horse's physical training on its erythrocyte energy metabolism and antioxidant system. It seems that your use of influence in a research context is inappropriate as the word influence signals a bit of bias towards a positive out come of your research. Horse's of course is right. Yuo may have seen many reasearch papers with this. hope this will help you in someway... Sunil Pathiraja Joined on Wed, Jan 3 2007 Sri Lanka New Member 04

	Deanbush  +  423641 Wed, 26 Sep 07 03:50 AM     The word "influence" does not, in any way, indicate a positive outcome.  Your use of "influence" in context is perfectly acceptable.  ". . . the influence of training . . . ."  could be negative or positive.  Who would know without reading further? Deanbush Joined on Tue, Sep 25 2007 Miami, FL New Member 04 Dean Bush Miami, Florida, USA Skype: deanbush Negatives