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Creativeguru  #529014  Wed, 18 Jun 08 09:26 AM
We are pleased to offer our patrons an exclusive preview of our Limited Edition.

'Disney Fine Jewelry' a work of art, created by master craftsmen, especially for the woman of today.

I want to tell it's for women specially so how can we rephrase the above sentences? In second sentence rather than wqoman of today i want it for design concious or fashion concious something on that lines
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Creativeguru  #529039  Wed, 18 Jun 08 10:52 AM

First line I modified to

We are pleased to offer our patrons specially for woman, an exclusive preview of our Limited Edition  

Second line i modified to

'Disney Fine Jewelry' a work of art, created by master craftsmen, especially for those fashion-conscious women who desire to look more stylish and classy
  
Feebs11  #529106  Wed, 18 Jun 08 01:30 PM
You have to be very careful to avoid sounding patronising to women:

 

We offer an exclusive preview of our latest Limited Edition to our patrons.

For any woman whose look is stylish, "Disney Fine Jewelry" is the obvious choice - works of art created by master craftsmen. 

  
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optilang  #529110  Wed, 18 Jun 08 01:37 PM
 For the woman who wants to look stylish ..........................................
  
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