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joeviee  #223517  Mon, 08 May 06 10:35 AM

I've been working on this sentence for hours and am stil not sure if its correctly constructed. It sounds somewhat unnatural to me and yet this is exactly what i want to say. Could someone suggest me a better way to reconstruct this sentence?

 

"My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities. From confronting with member’s complaints to resolving the complaint as much as possible, to finally strengthen the relationship between the company and the members. This was the main role as an Public Relations Exe in the company"

 

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rvw  #223523  Mon, 08 May 06 11:04 AM
What I noticed is that your middle "sentence" is not actually a sentence, so I would reword that.  Also, you changed from "customers" to "members."

My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities. I received customers’ complaints, resolved those complaints as much as possible, and finally strengthened the relationships between the company and the customers. Those were my main functions as a public relations executive in the company.
  
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joeviee  #223528  Mon, 08 May 06 11:34 AM

Thank you very much rvw. In your post, you said that my "sentence" is not actually a sentence. I do agree with you. But i have seen people using this kind of writing style in their essay. And i remember this particular well as in school teacher would encourage student to try different ways of writing a sentence as to prevent the whole essay sounds flat & uninteresting. My point here is, is there any way to reconstruct my sentence without changing its pattern. As in  "From (+)ing............., to (+ )ing............., and to ( +)ing, ...............". Combine all three simple sentence(or more) into a compound sentence without changing the meaning.

Any help would appreciatedSmile [:)]

Thanks.

  

  
rvw  #223531  Mon, 08 May 06 11:46 AM
You could put a dash or a colon after "activities" and then list those activities in "---ing" form.

My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities -- receiving customers’ complaints, resolving those complaints as much as possible, and finally strengthening the relationships between the company and the customers. Those were my main functions as a public relations executive in the company.
  
joeviee  #223536  Mon, 08 May 06 11:59 AM

Thanks rvm. You are very close to that, but what if i insisit on using this form:  From (+)ing............., to (+ )ing............., and to ( +)ing, ...............". Is that possible?

You might want to use other sentense to illustrate the above.

  
rvw  #223539  Mon, 08 May 06 12:03 PM
It depends on your level of formality.  Strictly speaking, three prepositional phrases do not make a sentence.  In a novel, artistic license would allow it.  But in an essay, I don't think it is acceptable.
  
joeviee  #223540  Mon, 08 May 06 12:12 PM

So did mean in my first sentence it is not wrong but perhaps less formal?

  
rvw  #223758  Tue, 09 May 06 03:03 AM
Yes. That is how I view it.  Others may see it differently.
  
joeviee  #223762  Tue, 09 May 06 03:13 AM

okie thanks....Smile [:)]

I would like to see what others think about this?

  
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