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Anonymous  #297166  Fri, 24 Nov 06 02:20 PM

                           TOPIC:  WHAT'S YOUR OPINION ABOUT EDUCATION IN MOLDOVA?

     Being a senior in a highschool in Moldova, it would seem easy to tell about what are my fellings toward education here , but unfortunetly it's not . Anyway, I think that my country has serious issues and education is not exception .In this essay I will name some problems that  often occur in moldovan highschools and draw a conclusion based on arguments that will follow.

    One serious problem is teachers salaries .It's important because ,if teachers are not paid well for their difficult job ,they will be less interested in helping students with their assignments .On the other hand ,if teachers are  well  paid  they would be more motivated in helping students with their difficulties that may occur in studying process  and also, they could give to them ;  a better perspective of the future  , some hints for a college aplication , a strong motivation , share life experencies etc.

   Another problem is  --bad marks . It's no one's fault but the student's for the bad mark.But , if  he/she regrets for being a little more lazy a day before , he/she would try to correct it , thus  he/she will be a top ''10''(--meaning he/she, will have only marks that are --10) student and still being far away from the mark that he/she deservs.That's because of our evaluational system based on numbers (--rational numbers) , different from American system based on letters ,where the chances this to happen are less likely. That  often puts pressure on teenagers and sometimes, they could and they do -- lot's of errors in judgement , often critizice the teachers.

   The other problem is dealing with the same marks , it's about the evaluation tests ; unfortunetly these tests are not reaching the international equivalents. A student who graduates ,would score poorly on such tests as :TOEFL , ITSL ,SAT, because he is not well prepared.

  Drawing a conclusion , I must say that educational system in Moldova is seriously damaged ; there are many problems ,but the most important ones are:teachers salaries , student's bad marks  and evaluation tests . I could only wish that these things would change but there are weak chances that it might.

  
julielai  #297311  Fri, 24 Nov 06 08:16 PM

Hi Anon,

I suggest you not put any spaces before commas and periods. See the period? I left a space after the period, but not before.

You also have a lot of unnecessary punctuations.

     Being a senior in a highschool in Moldova, it would seem easy to tell about what are my fellings toward education here , but unfortunetly it's not . Anyway, I think that my country has serious issues and education is not exception .In this essay I will name some problems that  often occur in moldovan highschools and draw a conclusion based on arguments that will follow (unclear - follow the conclusion?).

    One serious problem is teachers salaries .It's important because ,if teachers are not paid well for their difficult job ,they will be less interested in helping students with their assignments .On the other hand ,if teachers are  well  paid  they would be more motivated in helping students with their difficulties that may occur in studying process  and also, they could give to them ;  a better perspective of the future  , some hints for a college aplication , a strong motivation , share life experencies etc.

   Another problem is  --bad marks . It's no one's fault but the student's for the bad mark.But , if  he/she regrets for being a little more lazy a day before , he/she would try to correct it , thus  he/she will be a top ''10''(--meaning he/she, will have only marks that are --10) student and still being far away from the mark that he/she deservs.That's because of our evaluational system __ based on numbers (--rational numbers) , different from American system based on letters ,where the chances this to happen are less likely. That  often puts pressure on teenagers and sometimes, they could and they do -- lot's of errors in judgement , often critizice the teachers.

   The other problem is dealing with the same marks , it's about the evaluation tests ; unfortunetly these tests are not reaching the international equivalents. A student who graduates ,would score poorly on such tests as :TOEFL , ITSL ,SAT, because he is not well prepared.

  Drawing a conclusion , I must say that educational system in Moldova is seriously damaged ; there are many problems ,but the most important ones are:teachers salaries , student's bad marks  and evaluation tests . I could only wish that these things would change but there are weak chances that it might.

  
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Anonymous  #505582  Sat, 26 Apr 08 04:44 AM
Each and every people passed from the childhood.Childhood is the most important period in person's life.In this child has no tension and sterss.he will be free for doin anything.I agree with the statement :"Chidhood is the happies time of a person's life" because of the following reasons.
  First of all,Childhood is very crucial time for a person's life because there is not any stress or burden on child.Also,child has no tension during this period.For example,A child does not have to think what is right or wrong.He does not want to do any work for earning.he is totaly dependent on his family.
   Furthermore,Childhood give a lot of entertainment beacause of playing different game.A child can do whatever it want to do .For example , a child can play any game without thinking its good or bad.A child has freedom for doing any stuff.On the contrary,some time  because of this freedom child will be in trouble also.
  In addition, in childhood all family member give more attention and love to children.Everyone remarks each activity of child.All family member as well as others would like to play with child.For example,a child is ill then all family member take care of child.
 To sum up,I agree with the statement that Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life because of sympathty from family,freedom and no stress during this period.
  
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