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Latest post Thu, May 3 2007 10:29 PM by Stannum. 8 replies.
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Stannum  +  359455 Thu, 03 May 07 04:01 AM

Words are powerful and powerful people use words far more effectively and efficiently than warriors wield swords.

Words are in effect magic swords.

I proffer the following example for your consideration.

Ockam's

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naked

naked bruises

naked dressed in bruises

naked dressed in my bruises

naked dressed in but my bruises

naked dressed in nothing but my bruises

dressed in nothing but my bruises

dressed nothing but my bruises

dressed nothing but bruises

dressed nothing bruises

dressed bruises

dressed
Stannum
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Sara Straight & Tall  +  359476 Thu, 03 May 07 05:10 AM

The rays of the moon darken their light

whenever  I make love to you.

You might have kissed many other women

but now  you have taken me

with your mouth and your tongue

and its taste is sweet.

And the intensity of my feelings for you

cannot be measured

as the sands on the beaches cannot be counted
Sara Straight &...
Joined on Thu, May 3 2007
Galicia,Spain
Junior Member 71
A dog is prose. A cat is poetry.
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Stannum  +  359478 Thu, 03 May 07 05:21 AM

The problem for the uncomprehending naysayers is that a simple reversal strips bare their flaws.

Ockam Reveals

dressed

dressed bruises

dressed in bruises

dressed in but bruises

dressed in nothing but bruises

dressed in nothing but your briuses

naked dressed in nothing but your bruises

naked in nothing but your bruises

naked in nothing but bruises

naked in nothing bruises

naked in bruises

naked bruises

naked
Stannum
Sara Straight & Tall, 2 yr 190 days ago

Ok, don't get mad at me, just trying to write at my wit's ends...

Sara

Stannum  +  359517 Thu, 03 May 07 07:05 AM

It would appear that I can not even reply to my own poem.

I had posted it in the Controversial forum but it was moved here.

Stannum
Stannum
nona the brit  +  359533 Thu, 03 May 07 08:00 AM
That's because it's not a controversial topic.
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The name says it all.
Stannum  +  359547 Thu, 03 May 07 08:39 AM

 Nona The Brit wrote:
That's because it's not a controversial topic.
I am very pleased to hear that because I am ahvig the Devil of a time trying to post my words here.

I have kept copies of the bounced phrases if you are interested.

In any event the process has inspired an evolution of the poem so I must grant you my undying gratitude.  This is very rare!

Ockam's

W

a

r

n

i

n

g

dressed

dressed bruises

dressed in bruises

dressed in my bruises

dressed in but my bruises

dressed in nothing but my bruises

Naked, dressed in nothing but my bruises!

naked in nothing but my bruises

naked in nothing but bruises

naked in nothing bruises

naked in nothing

naked nothing

naked

Aragorn the Paladin
Stannum
Alexa For Australia  +  359677 Thu, 03 May 07 03:41 PM

Sorry,

It is Peregrin, son of Paladin.

Aragorn, son of Arathorn of the line of Nimloth, King of Gondor and Lord of the Western Lands.

You're mixing them up!

Alexa 
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Stannum  +  359883 Thu, 03 May 07 10:29 PM

Aragorn

d

a

n

g

l

e

s

smudges

dressed smudges

dressed in smudges

dressed in but smudges

dressed in nothing but smudges

dressed in nothing but my smudges

Naked, dressed in nothing but your smudges!

naked in nothing but your smudges

naked in nothing but smudges

naked in nothing smudges

naked nothing smudges

naked smudges

smudges

Adam Omega
Stannum
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