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Vincent Teo  +  950610 Fri, 23 Oct 09 01:01 PM
Please help me to correct if I'm wrong, thanks!


One day, my little boy seemed disturbed and kept crying and mumbling. I realized he had been "disturbed" by someone. In other words, something spiritual was disturbing him, so I prayed hard that night and asked for a sign so that I could know what it was.


That night, well it may have been dream, but I could see two headless figures holding a lighted torch making towards my house.


They stopped at the front door at my house. One was wearing a red cheongsam and the other was wearing a white cheongsam. I think they were trying to get into my house but couldn't because we were protected. 


The next day, I went and told the medicine man what I had seen and now, they knew what the problem was. They took appropriate actions, players and everything to my little boy. Now, my little boy became all right by the end of it all.






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Vincent Teo  +  951359 Sat, 24 Oct 09 10:02 AM
Please kindly give me your comments, thanks!!
Vincent Teo, 28 days ago
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Vincent Teo, 28 days ago
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Grammar Geek  +  952598 Sun, 25 Oct 09 03:16 PM
Vincent Teo
“Please help me to correct if I'm wrong, thanks!



One day, my little boy seemed disturbed and kept crying and mumbling. I realized he had been "disturbed" by someone. In other words, something spiritual was disturbing him, so I prayed hard that night and asked for a sign so that I could know what it was. This paragraph is very good.


That night, well, it may have been dream, but I could see two headless figures holding a lighted torch making their way towards my house. Punctuation with this is hard. I would say "lit" instead of "lighted" but "lighted" may be okay.


They stopped at the front door at of my house. One was wearing a red cheongsam and the other was wearing a white cheongsam. I think they were trying to get into my house but couldn't because we were protected. I don't know what a cheongsam is, but if you're sure it's right, then this is okay. How were you protected? That part isn't clear.


The next day, I went and told the medicine man [better than "went and told the medicine man" is "went to the medicine man and told him"] what I had seen and now, they then he knew what the problem was. They He took appropriate actions, players [do you mean prayers?] and everything [what is everything?]  to my little boy. Now, my little boy became all right by the end of it all.  Either "Now my little boy is all right" or "My little boy was all right in the end."

The idea of prayers in the first paragraph makes me think Christian, Jewish, Muslim - one God. Then the "medicine man" makes me think tribal religion. If the prayers were not to God/Allah, then you should say who you prayed to.


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