Hey all. Before submitting my Halls of Residence application to a University, I would like to make sure that the following sentences are grammatically correct and flow well:
Section 4. What positions of responsibility do you hold and / or awards have you received at school?In 2005, I am the Y12 Top Biology student. In 2006, I am the webpage coordinator for my house and I peer-tutor up to 7 students per week.
Sporting Interests and Comments1. Badminton - Played for school under Grade C
2. Chees - Represented school for chess tournament
3. Jogging - A casual jogger
4. Swimming - Swim occasionally during the holidays
5. Cycling - Cycle regularly during the weekends
Cultural Interests and Comments1. Music - Obtained Grade 5 in Practical and Grade 4 in Theory
2. Fo Guang Shan Temple - Aid in morning service every Sunday
3. Food Festival - Helped to serve food for Thai stall (2006)
4. Multicultural Festival - Helped to prepare food and participated in multicultural activities(2005)
Community Interests and Comments
1. Retirement Home - I have been helping out for the past few months. Tasks include serving breakfast and lunch, playing games with the residents and having conversation with them
2. Web Forum - An active member of Neowin computer forum (1891 posts)
3. World 40 Hour Famine - I abstained from technology products for 40 hours
4. Celcom Youth Ambassador - A youth ambassador for Celcom (Malaysia). I asssisted in educating 20 orphans about computers
5. Sports Day - I was a St. John member in Malaysia. I helped to treat those with minor injuries on that day.
That's all! Thank you very much.