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nobwayner

#53502 Thu, 04 Nov 04 12:36 AM

i have to write an annotated biblography for my western civ class but im having trouble writing my thesis, i was wondering if maybe you guys could give me a little feedback thanks.

this was my original thesis:
The Patricians were unjustly favored in Hammurabi's code
my professors comments were: "true, but diffrent times have diffrent standards of justice and equality. If this were an ethics class we might indulge in a discussion of this nature, but it is not. This is a history class, your statement must reflect a historical perspective"

kind of bonehead move on my part, i wasnt really thinking, and im hoping my revised thesis has a historical point to it, let me know....

this is my revised thesis:
Hammurabi’s code shaped Mesopotamian law and dramatically fashioned the written laws of civilizations to come.

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nona the brit

#53585 Thu, 04 Nov 04 02:01 PM

It may have had a dramatic effect upon future legal systems but surely it didn't actually fashion (create) all written laws of civilizations to come.

nona the brit

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The name says it all.

nobwayner

#53610 Thu, 04 Nov 04 03:38 PM

im having trouble putting the thesis into a historical presepctive, any advice?

nobwayner

nona the brit

#53633 Thu, 04 Nov 04 07:25 PM

I'm not too sure what you are looking for here.

Hammurabi’s code not only shaped Mesopotamian law but its effects were seen in the legal systems of later civilisations?

nona the brit

nobwayner

#53658 Thu, 04 Nov 04 11:38 PM

thanks but i was just looking for some kinda guidence, cuz shes a tough grader and i wasnt sure if my thesis was "historical"

nobwayner