Thesis please help

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nobwayner  #53502  Thu, 04 Nov 04 12:36 AM
i have to write an annotated biblography for my western civ class but im having trouble writing my thesis, i was wondering if maybe you guys could give me a little feedback thanks.


this was my original thesis:
The Patricians were unjustly favored in Hammurabi's code
my professors comments were: "true, but diffrent times have diffrent standards of justice and equality. If this were an ethics class we might indulge in a discussion of this nature, but it is not. This is a history class, your statement must reflect a historical perspective"

kind of bonehead move on my part, i wasnt really thinking, and im hoping my revised thesis has a historical point to it, let me know....

this is my revised thesis:
Hammurabi’s code shaped Mesopotamian law and dramatically fashioned the written laws of civilizations to come.
  
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nona the brit  #53585  Thu, 04 Nov 04 02:01 PM
It may have had a dramatic effect upon future legal systems but surely it didn't actually fashion (create) all written laws of civilizations to come.
  
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nobwayner  #53610  Thu, 04 Nov 04 03:38 PM
im having trouble putting the thesis into a historical presepctive, any advice?
  
nona the brit  #53633  Thu, 04 Nov 04 07:25 PM
I'm not too sure what you are looking for here.

Hammurabi’s code not only shaped Mesopotamian law but its effects were seen in the legal systems of later civilisations?
  
nobwayner  #53658  Thu, 04 Nov 04 11:38 PM
thanks but i was just looking for some kinda guidence, cuz shes a tough grader and i wasnt sure if my thesis was "historical"
  
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