Hello All,

I am attempting to write an autobiographical essay for admission to FIT in the spring.  It's been a while since I've really written anything personal (too busy writing college papers ).  I'm having trouble coming up with a thesis statement.  Do I even need a thesis statement?  How can I tie my life together into one or two sentences?  They asked to write the following:  an autobiographical essay about your choice of FIT and major, your special interests and awards, honors, employment background, goals, likes, dislikes, strengths, weaknesses, etc.  Of course I have the information they ask for, I'm just having trouble getting started.  Any advice?

Well here's what I have so far.  I am open to all suggestions, so all criticism is welcome.  Thanks!

I am a prospective student at the Fashion Institute of Technology applying to the fashion design program.  As far back as I can remember, even as a small child, I have recognized a deep passion for the fashion and had the ultimate goal of becoming a top fashion designer well known in both the fashion industry as well as the entertainment industry.  I believe that FIT will be a great building block that will contribute to that goal.  After learning of the school’s history and reputation for developing the finest designers in the industry, I am more than confident that attending the institute would instill in me, the experience I need to obtain my ultimate goal.  I am a hard-working, determined creative individual who will strive to surpass expectations and contribute greatly to the school’s celebrated repute.chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>