To A Girl

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Dew 2007

#445709 Sat, 24 Nov 07 06:40 AM

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A girl of dream or distant blinking star?
You are so close, still you are so far.
I want to reach you, touch your tender hand,
But I’m afraid that you’ll misunderstand…

The heart and soul of mine is filled with you,
And no one will tell me what to do.
Should I escape from feelings and the Love?
Or should I yield to it and fly above?

You come to me in dreams. I see your face,
I feel your breath so close in my embrace.
In dreams I taste your lips and touch your skin
And I’m as happy as I’ve never been.

Oh, dear! What am I to do?
You can’t be mine, I can’t help loving you.

Dew 2007

Joined on Sun, Jun 17 2007

Russia

Contributing Member (1,347)

Keep wondering!

Dew 2007

#445721 Sat, 24 Nov 07 08:23 AM

***
I raise my eyes and see the cold sky
It’s like a kind of wall so mighty great
That separates me from the land of thine
And puts me fully in the hands of fate.

You’re far away behind this gloomy sky
My lips can’t touch you in a gentle kiss.
And snobbish clouds passing low by
Will not remind me of my dear Miss.

My cry can’t reach you, but why should I cry,
If all the sounds die imprisoned here?
The Heavens won’t let me even try
To join my faithfully beloved dear.

But no matter how the Heavens try
The Love is stronger than the gloomy sky!

Dew 2007

julielai

#445913 Sat, 24 Nov 07 09:12 PM

You need to work on your iambs if you want to write a sonnet.

julielai

Joined on Sun, Oct 24 2004

Planet earth

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Blue-eyed Smiler

#452643 Thu, 13 Dec 07 06:00 AM

Fantastic!Oh, compatriot, your poems are awesome, I especially liked the first one.If you want to take a heart of a girl- just show this poem, that is so damn romantic Girl [X]

Blue-eyed Smiler

Joined on Tue, Aug 15 2006

Siberia

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I hope I can change myself and others

Anonymous

#454252 Mon, 17 Dec 07 08:21 PM

the wording is confusing, no real point. a few lines a kinda childish, and immaturely written. it didn't steal my heart.

Anonymous

Uyasar

#459215 Tue, 01 Jan 08 06:36 PM

really good!

Uyasar

Joined on Fri, Dec 7 2007

New Member (03)

Meeting English

Viki Teen

#462230 Wed, 09 Jan 08 01:38 PM

Nice work, but do you find it too complicated? Though some sentences are unuseless, but you better cut down some.

Viki Teen

Joined on Wed, Jan 9 2008

Shenzhen

New Member (03)

Here I was and there you were When I reach where you were You are always where I was We did never be together But we hope to Maybe it is what destiny is

The White Rose

#472944 Tue, 05 Feb 08 12:25 PM

well done , I liked it.

The White Rose

Joined on Tue, Feb 5 2008

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becareful from who feels pain and wants you to know