urgent help: please check my motivation letter

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#175627 Wed, 28 Dec 05 06:41 PM

Hi all,
I've prepared a letter of motivation and I don't know if it is good enough or not. Please check and leave your comments. Any help from anyone is appreciated. Smile [:)]

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Long Hoang Nguyen
534 Hong Bang
Ho Chi Minh City>

>Dear Sir or Madam,

>>I am writing to you an application for the Master’s Degree in Security and Mobile Computing in Helsinki University of Technology. I want to further develope my knowledge, improve my life style and gain a broadened point of view through this programme.

>>I graduated in Software Engineer in July 2005 from the University of Natural Sciences in Vietnam. My studies focused on distributed application, web services and ecommerce. My thesis is about Service-oriented architecture. I then worked for TMA Solution, an outsourcing branch of Nortel Network organization in networking and telecommunication field. I like problem solving and figuring things out. Facing challenges, team-work, creativity and flexibility are also my strong points.

The reasons for me to have chosen this top-level programme are many. Firstly, I want to further improve my strong technical skills, which can be achieved by studying in Helsinki University of Technology TTK, whose mobile communications researching and teaching is considered to be among the best in the world. Secondly, we live in a very dynamic world, which requires flexibility and creativity, people should get in touch with other languages and cultures, not to mention networking. On this programme, I will have a chance to meet different kinds of people and cultures that will give me different points of view, hence contributing for flexibility and creativity, besides the cultural gains. After I graduate, I intend to pursue my career in IT field. Last but not least, I know that education and reality are different. But your program will allow me to accomplish both.>>

To sum up, I consider my qualifications and interests, as exposed above, to be sufficient to enable me to make a good course at your programme and make good use of all the knowledge I gather throughout this program in the future and later career. I really hope my application will be considered and accepted. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours sincerely,

Long Hoang Nguyen"

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nona the brit

#176471 Fri, 30 Dec 05 01:56 PM

Hi,

This is a pretty good letter. Just double check some of your spellings (develop my knowledge). I also wouldn't mention that you want to improve your lifestyle as that seems a bit shallow...

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The name says it all.

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#176505 Fri, 30 Dec 05 02:54 PM

Thank for your comment Smile [:)]

Your words make me more confident

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#180262 Sun, 08 Jan 06 12:52 PM

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Yours sincerely, Marija Perovska

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