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Esophea  #375189  Tue, 05 Jun 07 04:13 AM

Oversea study has several advantages and disadvantages. At first I describe about advantages of oversea study. When we study abroad, we can practice a lot of skills like speaking, listening and other skills. It is a good point to improve your foreign languages. For example, when you go to study USA or England, you can practice your English study, and we can speak with native speaker or can receive a right stress for any words. Other point, we have confident for study and living alone. It means that you should take care yourself because you are not continuing to live with your parents. You will study alone because when you go to new place or new country, you haven’t closed friends. Furthermore, we can know different culture because we meet a lot of foreign friends that came from different countries. On the other hand, when we study abroad, we spent a lot of money. If we get this money to study our own country, we will save a lot of money because school or university fee is cheaper than abroad university fee. In addition, we are difficult to get in touch with family. For instance, when we study at the own country, we can meet our parents every time after we came back from school or university. Other reason is that we are hard to adapt to a new environment such as weather, living or culture, etc. For example, when you live at your own country like Asia, the weather is enough hot and wet, but when we stay abroad like USA, it is very hot and very cold. In the first time, you are difficult to live at the new place because you can not know all the places that you want to go. Especially, we are difficult to relate with someone because you do not know how to communication with other foreign people. Depending on all these points, we can say that studying abroad have good points and bad points.

  
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julielai  #375208  Tue, 05 Jun 07 06:00 AM

Highlighted some of your glaring errors.

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Oversea study has several advantages and disadvantages. At first I describe about advantages of oversea study. When we study abroad, we can practice a lot of skills like speaking, listening and other skills. You can improve your foreign languages. For example, when you go to study (prep.) USA or England, you can practice your English study, and we can speak with native speaker (one?) or can receive a right stress for any words. Other point, we have confident for study and living alone. It means that you learn to take care (prep.) yourself because you are not continuing to live with your parents. You will study alone because when you go to (article) new place or new country, you haven’t closed friends. Furthermore, we can know (wording) a different culture because we meet a lot of foreign friends that came (tense) from different countries. On the other hand, when we study abroad, we spent (tense) a lot of money. If we get this money to study (prep) our own country, we will save a lot of money because school or university fee is cheaper than abroad university fee. In addition, we are difficult to get in touch with family (What are you trying to say?). For instance, when we study at the own country, we can meet our parents every time after we came back from school or university. Other reason is that we are It is hard to adapt to a new environment, but when you live at your own country like Asia (not a country) (The rest doesn't make sense. Please rephrase.). In the first time, you are difficult to live at the new place because you can not know all the places that you want to go. Especially, we are difficult to relate with someone because you do not know how to communication with other foreign people. All in all, we can say that studying abroad have (agreement) good points and bad points.

  
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