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Kedra  +  331734 Wed, 21 Feb 07 12:10 PM

The below passage is an abstract from the article I am writing. The article is dedicated to the advantages of being an owner of the small vacation rental web site instead of a large international  vacation rental portal. I am interested very much in its style, does it sound English? I will appreciate if someone could correct me both in style and grammar. Thank you very much in advance.

Document your financial relationships

 

Small vacation rental web site, dedicated to one specific country or region, shows more professionalism and generates more trust if it offers property owners and guests to sign rental agreements. Being the owner of large vacation rental web site you have owners from different countries with different local laws. It is hard to control all the deals between property owners and tenants in this case.

 

If you own the web site, dedicated to one region, you can spend some time to compose a legal document, which would be valid for this very region and applicable for your owners-guests. Such rental agreement should describe the most likely disputes, which can arise between an owner and a guest: furniture damage, insurance, guest-owner responsibilities, abandonment, payment schedule, etc. People feel more comfortable when their financial deals are backed up by legal force.      
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Mister Micawber  +  331754 Wed, 21 Feb 07 02:13 PM

Document your financial relationships

Operators of large vacation rental websites have owners from different countries with different local laws, so it is hard to control all the agreements/negotiations between property owners and tenants, but a small vacation rental website dedicated to one specific country or region shows more professionalism and generates more trust if it offers rental agreements prepared on behalf of property owners and guests [I guess that is your meaning].

If you operate a website dedicated to one region, you can compose legal documents valid for your region and appropiate for your owners and guests. Such rental agreements should describe the most likely disputes that can arise between owner and guest: furniture and fixture damage, insurance, guest and owner responsibilities, abandonment, payment schedule, etc. People feel more comfortable when their financial arrangements are backed up by legal documentation.
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Kedra  +  331807 Wed, 21 Feb 07 05:08 PM
Hi Mister Micawber, wow, you changed the first paragraph upside down! I've never thought it might be changed that much. Thank you very much for your assistance!
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