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GS3301  #436038  Sun, 28 Oct 07 04:24 PM
I was shortening my letter already cuz it's too long but it isn't that easy for me. I am german and drift always into too long sentences!

 

Dear Ms. Dalby,

I am interested if your company is currently offering any entry positions within the area of the Stewarding & Housekeeping department in which I would like to be considered for all physical work such as Dishwasher, Kitchen Steward, Spa Cleaner, Housekeeper and where else cleaning experience would be an asset.

If such position becomes available, it would be great if you give me the opportunity to discuss your needs and objectives. I am very reliable and focused on my work, cooperatively and decidedly friendly to the hotel guests.

The last 9 month I have worked in the [...] Lodge at [...] in Canada, in which I got the chance to gain valuable experience in the following departments such as Housekeeping, Stewarding, and Spa. In my job I improved as room attendant & night cleaner a lot of my productivity and efficiency.

The previous experience is a good foundation for a new job opportunity for an entry to mid level position in your company and I am willing to develop further skills.

Should any position be available within the near future, I hope that you'll find my experience and interests intriguing enough to warrant a personal meeting, as I am confident that I could provide value to you and your customers as a member of your team.

Thank you for taking the time and consideration and I look forward to hear from you about any employment opportunity.

Respectfully yours,

  
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nona the brit  #436756  Tue, 30 Oct 07 11:33 AM

Dear Ms. Dalby,

I am interested in fnding out if your company is currently offering any entry positions within the area of the Stewarding & Housekeeping department. I would like to be considered for any role such as Dishwasher, Kitchen Steward, Spa Cleaner, Housekeeper or anything else where my cleaning experience would be an asset.

For the last 9 months I have worked at the [...] Lodge at [...] in Canada, in which I got the chance to gain valuable experience in the following departments: Housekeeping, Stewarding, and Spa. I acquired good skills as a room attendant & night cleaner and put a lot of effort into my productivity and efficiency.

This experience would be a good foundation for an entry to mid level position in your company and I am willing to develop further skills.

Should any position become available within the near future, I hope that you'll find my experience and interests intriguing enough to warrant a personal meeting, as I am confident that I could provide value to you and your customers as a member of your team. I am very reliable and focused on my work, work well in a team, and show a friendly attitude to the hotel guests.



Thank you for taking the time to consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you about any employment opportunities.

Respectfully yours,

  
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GS3301  #436818  Tue, 30 Oct 07 03:38 PM
hey nona the brit, thank you so much! You really made my day a lot easier. kind regards from Canada
  
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