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Nancy1982

#233121 Tue, 06 Jun 06 09:20 PM

Hi, this is Nancy of City of Quaqua, Georgia. Is this Steve Jones of Applebee's Grill Restaurant? I am calling to ask a few minutes of your time to let you know that we need an Applebee’s Grill Restaurant in the City of Powder Springs. At the town Hall meeting, our residents expressed that they want more restaurants to the City, especially the Applebee’s Grill House. We are in the vital economic development so we went out and hired a market analysis group named BuxtonIdentify Customers. After the market analysis, the data shows that you restaurant has great potential of success. We were not only based on the population, trading area, also based on company requirements for opening a new location. I know that Applebee’s Grill Restaurant refers to be in a community strip center and freestanding location, and refer mid to high-income adults and seniors. As you may not know, Powder Springs considers itself as a “bedroom community” and 30 percent of our population is ranged from 35 to 64 years age. So, I would like you to have City of Powder Springs as one of your next Applebee’s Grill expansion location. I promise you won’t regret, we are friendly community and the city is willing to work with you any possible ways.

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Welkins2139

#233229 Wed, 07 Jun 06 05:08 AM

Hi, this is Nancy from the City of Quaqua, Georgia.

Is this Steve Jones of Applebee's Grill Restaurant?

I'm calling you that we like to have an Applebee’s Grill Restaurant in the City of Powder Springs.

At the town hall meeting , our residents expressed themselves who wanted more restaurants to the City, especially Applebee’s Grill House.

Because we are in the economic development, we've hired Buxton Identify Customers for market analysis.

The market data from Buxton showed that your restaurant had a great potential to succeed.

It was not only from the population survey and trading area, but also from companies requested for the new location.

I know that Applebee’s Grill Restaurant likes to open in a community strip center and free-standing location.

As you may know, Powder Springs considers itself as a “bedroom community” and 30 percent of its population are from 35 to 64 years old, whose family income levels are from mid to high.

So I hope you'd open your next Applebee’s Grill in the City of Power Spring.

I promise you won’t regret it because we are a friendly community and the city is willing to work with you in any possible ways.

Welkins2139