Would you check my English?

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Kenta  #576758  Wed, 15 Oct 08 10:26 PM
Hello. I make it a rule to write a dialogue in English everyday to improve my English.
Will you check them?

No. 1

M: Do you have change for a dollar?

F: Sorry, no, I don't. What do you need it for?

M: I thought I need some change for the bus.

F: Then don't worry. You can break it in the bus.

No. 2  At the cafe ( M is a waiter.)

M: Good morning. Would you like the usual?

F: Oh, what a surprise! Do you remember what I want?

M: Of course. You love the double-decker, don't you?

                            

  
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Goodman  #576762  Wed, 15 Oct 08 10:35 PM
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Hello. I make it a rule to write a dialogue in English everyday to improve my English.
Will you check them?

No. 1

M: Do you have change for a dollar?

F: Sorry, no, I don't. What do you need it for?

M: I thought I need some change for the bus.

F: Then don't worry. You can break it on  in the bus.

No. 2  At the cafe ( M is a waiter.)

M: Good morning. Would you like the usual?

F: Oh, what a surprise! Do you remember what I want?

M: Of course. You love the double-decker, don't you?

                            



Looked good! just a couple of minor changes...
  
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RayH  #576780  Thu, 16 Oct 08 12:16 AM
No. 1

M: Do you have change for a dollar?

F: Sorry, no, I don't. What do you need it for?    I don't have a problem with "Sorry, no, I don't" but normally you would use just one of them.

M: I thought I need some change for the bus.    I'm not sure why you say "thought" here. I implies that you did need change but that you now realize that you don't need change. I would leave it out.

F: Then don't worry. You can break it in on the bus.

No. 2  At the cafe ( M is a waiter.)

M: Good morning. Would you like the usual?

F: Oh, what a surprise! Do you remember what I want?

M: Of course. You love the double-decker, don't you?
Number two looks good.
  
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