Is it ok if i write the letter for establish business relation like this?

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Cecilia Tang  #317159  Fri, 19 Jan 07 08:52 AM
Hello everyone,
Can you give me any suggestion about my letter for establish business relation as below?Thank you.
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Dear all,
 
I would like to take this opportunity to introduce me to you. This is *** from *** Printing Co., Ltd.
 
I obtain your information from *** who was responsible for your account at *** company.And know that all of you are kind business partner. We would like to establish business relation with you for our mutual benefit. It's appreciated that have your feedback if available.Thank you in advance!!!
 
We, a professional printing and packaging manufacturer, specialized  in various of printed package such as shopping bags, set up and folding boxes, calendars, cards and books. We are ready to supply you with fashionable designed, good quality and competitive prices. We have been enjoyed high reputation from our customers home and aboard.To get more information, please click our company sebwite (www.***.com).
 
We're pleased to add you to our list of clients.If you have any questions, please feel free to contact with me.
 
Yours sincerely,
Cecilia
  
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nona the brit  #317167  Fri, 19 Jan 07 09:33 AM
Dear all, - only appropriate if each letter is going to be read by several people, and very informal. Dear Sir/Madam is better.
 
I would like to take this opportunity to introduce myself. This is *** from *** Printing Co., Ltd.
 
obtained your details from *** who was responsible for your account at *** company and know that you are the type of business we would like to partner with. We would like to establish a  business relation with you for our mutual benefit. We would appreciate any feedback from you on this.Thank you in advance!
 
We, a professional printing and packaging manufacturer, specialize  in various types of printed materials such as shopping bags, set up and folding boxes, calendars, cards and books. We are ready to supply you with fashionably designed, good quality items at competitive prices. We have a good reputation with our customers home and abroad.To get more information, please click our company webwite (www.***.com).
 
We would be pleased to add you to our list of clients.If you have any questions, please feel free to contact me.
 
Yours faithfully,
Cecilia
  
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Cecilia Tang  #317174  Fri, 19 Jan 07 09:53 AM
hi nona,thanks for your comments.
  
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