How to write sentences that native English speakers understand?

Hello all,

How can I improve my writing skills so that it's widely understood by everyone, particularly, native American and English speakers. Because I've written a simple newsletter and was told that English speakers do not understand some of my phrases. But, then, I showed that article to someone from the Middle East, they understand what I've written.

What should I do? Any advice on what should I read to increase my writing skills?

Yoong Liat wrote:

Starget1 wrote: Hello all, How can I improve my writing skills so that it's widely understood by everyone, particularly, native American and English speakers. Because I've written a simple newsletter and was told that English speakers do not understand some of my phrases. But, then, I showed that article to someone from the Middle East, they understand what I've written. What should I do? Any advice on what should I read to increase my writing skills? Maybe you should reproduce the newsletter you've written so that our members can comment on it. I think you should pose more questions and learn from the comments given by the forum members.

Okay, here's the newsletter. I've posted in another thread.. but no response. Anyway, Please  comment whether I've grammatical errors or sentence structure errors. Thank you.

Greetings!

First week of every month will signify another brand new anticipation! We at company name hope that by receiving our newsletter, it will glitter your day!
Everytime you receive newsletter from us, we have surprises for you. This newsletter is not an exception too. Right at the moment you view this newsletter,
you will notice a big difference already! If you haven't, then, proceed to the gist of our announcement today. We shall notify you more on that.

Yup, you are right! We have had a brand new look in our newsletter's design layout. How do you like it? Hope it's soothing to your eyes. We make this
changes to have a more systematic layout of information flow. Then, we want to make your life more colourful by presenting new layouts from time to time.

Now it's first week of the month, meaning the announcement of "Contest Name" contest winners is here again! I bet all of you must be excited and can't wait
to find out who are the next "Contest Name" contest winners, right? Waste no more time, we shall now announce the winners for the month of September.

-
-
-

How's your luck this time? Hope your name is one of those listed above. If not, don't be dismayed. You still have numerous chances, in fact, this month you
have extra chances!! Wondering what is it? Continue reading this newsletter to find out...

In conjunction with the coming Halloween on 31 Oct 2006, we have our Halloween promotion this month with up to 90% discount for your hosting!! Mind you,
90%!! It's indeed exciting because this promotion is based on how speedy you are. Below is a list of discount coupons with their respective discount
rates for limited number of clients:

Coupon code >> 90% - 1 lucky client

Coupon code >> 80% - 2 lucky clients

Coupon code >> 70% - 3 lucky clients

Coupon code >> 60% - 4 lucky clients

So, if the 90% coupon fails for you, you can proceed to try the 80% coupon and so on. This offer will start now until 31 October 2006. Since it's
first come first served basis, discount coupons might have been finished using by 31 October 2006.

Please be reminded that there are terms and conditions. They are as follows:

1) Apply for new signup of hosting only
2) Discount is valid only for the 1st year of hosting
3) Payment has to be made within 24 hours, else, the coupon code will be voided
4) Applicable for "packages name" packages only
5) Not exchangeable with cash or other offers
6) It's a one-time off discount
7) Company Name reserves the rights to cancel this promotion or made changes without any prior notice

To wrap up this newsletter, we wish you all the lucks in the world and remember to act now! Hear from us again real soon! And to all our clients,
Company Name wishes you Happy Halloween!

Milky wrote:

What do you mean by "native American" and "English" speakers? Do you mean native speakers of American English and of British English?

Sorry. What I meant was "native speakers of American English and of British English". Anyway, just as you read my newsletter, do you understand? Or have some problems understanding certain sentences?

Thanks.

Starget1 wrote:

Hello, anyone please help me by reviewing the above newsletter? Really really wish someone could give some response . Thanks a lot.

In the main, it should be understandable to most English speakers. I would make to following changes:

Greetings!

The first week of every month will signify another brand new anticipation! We at company name hope that by receiving our newsletter, it will glitter your day! (not a common collocation/expression, but it can be understood)
Every time you receive a newsletter from us, we will have surprises for you. This newsletter is no exception. If you are reading this newsletter at the moment,
you will have noticed notice a big difference already! If you aren’t, then proceed to the gist of our announcement today. We shall notify you more on that.

Yup, you are right! We have had a brand new look in our newsletter's layout. How do you like it? Hope it's soothing to your eyes. We made these
changes to have a more systematic layout of information flow. Also, we wanted to make your life more colourful by presenting new layouts from time to time.

Now it's the first week of the month, meaning the announcement of "Contest Name" contest winners is here again! I bet all of you must be excited and can't wait
to find out who are the next "Contest Name" contest winners, right? Let’s waste no more time, we shall now announce the winners for the month of September.

-
-
-

How's your luck this time? Hope your name is one of those listed above. If not, don't be dismayed, you still have numerous chances. In fact, this month you
have extra chances!! Wondering what they are? Continue reading this newsletter to find out...

In conjunction with the coming Halloween on 31 Oct 2006, we have our Halloween promotion this month with up to 90% discount for your hosting! Yes,
90%!! It is indeed exciting because this promotion is based on how speedy you are. Below is a list of discount coupons with their respective discount
rates for limited a number of clients:

Coupon code >> 90% - 1 lucky client

Coupon code >> 80% - 2 lucky clients

Coupon code >> 70% - 3 lucky clients

Coupon code >> 60% - 4 lucky clients

So, if the 90% coupon fails for you, you can proceed to try the 80% coupon and so on. This offer will begin now and last until 31 October 2006. Since it's
first come first served basis, discount coupons might have been used up by 31 October 2006.

Please be reminded that there are terms and conditions to this promotion. They are as follows:

1) applies to a new signup of hosting only
2) discount is valid only for the 1st year of hosting
3) payment has to be made within 24 hours, or else the coupon code will be void
4) applicable for "packages name" packages only
5) not exchangeable with cash or other offers
6) this is a one-time-only discount
7) Company Name reserves the rights to cancel this promotion or make changes without prior notice

To wrap up this newsletter, we wish you all the luck in the world and please remember to act now! You’ll be hearing from us again real soon! And to all our clients,
Company Name wishes you Happy Halloween!

Nona The Brit wrote:

Hi, It's all perfectly understandable but not all of it sounds natural or is grammatical. I've highlighted parts that are not grammatical in red, incorrect word choices in blue, and just 'not how a native speaker would put it' in yellow. I've made a few corrections to the early part in red text. First week of every month will signify another brand new anticipation! We at company name hope that by receiving our newsletter, it will glitter your day! Everytime you receive a newsletter from us, we will have surprises for you. This newsletter is no exception.  As soon as you read this newsletter, you will notice a big difference! If you haven't, then, proceed to the gist of our announcement today. We shall notify you more on that. Yup, you are right! We have a brand new look in our newsletter's design layout (design or layout, not both). How do you like it? Hope it's soothing to your eyes. We have made these changes to have a more systematic layout of information flow. Then, we want to make your life more colourful by presenting new layouts from time to time. Now it's first week of the month, meaning the announcement of "Contest Name" contest winners is here again! I bet all of you must be excited and can't wait to find out who  the next "Contest Name" contest winners are, right? Waste no more time, we shall now announce the winners for the month of September. - - - How's your luck this time? Hope your name is one of those listed above. If not, don't be dismayed. You still have numerous chances, in fact, this month you have extra chances!! Wondering what is it? Continue reading this newsletter to find out... In conjunction with the coming Halloween on 31 Oct 2006, we have our Halloween promotion this month with up to 90% discount for your hosting!! Mind you, 90%!! It's indeed exciting because this promotion is based on how speedy you are. Below is a list of discount coupons with their respective discount rates for limited number of clients: Coupon code >> 90% - 1 lucky client Coupon code >> 80% - 2 lucky clients Coupon code >> 70% - 3 lucky clients Coupon code >> 60% - 4 lucky clients So, if the 90% coupon fails for you, you can proceed to try the 80% coupon and so on. This offer will start now until 31 October 2006. Since it's first come first served basis, discount coupons might have been finished using by 31 October 2006. Please be reminded that there are terms and conditions. They are as follows: 1) Apply for new signup of hosting only 2) Discount is valid only for the 1st year of hosting 3) Payment has to be made within 24 hours, else, the coupon code will be voided 4) Applicable for "packages name" packages only 5) Not exchangeable with cash or other offers 6) It's a one-time off discount 7) Company Name reserves the rights to cancel this promotion or made changes without any prior notice To wrap up this newsletter, we wish you all the lucks in the world and remember to act now! Hear from us again real soon! And to all our clients, Company Name wishes you Happy Halloween!

Thanks nona! The highlighted words/sentences mean that you find it difficult to understand? Or those are the grammatical errrors?