need help writing a short biography

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X_Fred  #514219  Thu, 15 May 08 11:58 PM
Hi there. I wrote the following biography for my university professor. would you guys be kind enough to perfect it a bit? maybe alter what comes first and what comes next? i'd really really appreciate it.

 

 Born in 1954, in the city of Shiraz, Iran, {Name} started off academic studies in UK's Dudley Technical College. He got his first degree in Mathematics and Statistics from Polytechnic of North London, and his second degree in Numerical Analysis from Brunel University. After obtaining an MPhil in Applied Mathematics from Iran's Polytechnic University, he was appointed Professor of Mathematics at Iran's IAU. in 1993, he applied at UK's Open University, acquiring a Ph.D. in Numerical Analysis. His research interests include numerical solution of ODE’s, differential equations and integral equations as well as DAE and spectral methods. He has published 8 successful books in the area of mathematics . The immense popularity of his books is deemed as a reflection of more than 30 years of educational experience, and a result of his accessible style of writing, as well as a broad coverage of well laid out and is easy to follow subjects. His books on calculus, differential equations and advanced engineering, are considered a reference book in several renown universities in Iran (including SUA, the country's most prestigous private university). He is currently a board member at IAU, Iran.
 

 

I also want to somehow mention the fact that he has published 18 books, 8 of which being more successful.

 

also, what do you think, the brown part or this piece?: He obtained his first degree in Mathematics and Statistics from Polytechnic of North London, followed by a second degree in Numerical Analysis from Brunel University. After obtaining an..

 

 

  
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Anonymous  #514265  Fri, 16 May 08 02:25 AM

Since this is an autobiography, wouldn't it be better to write it in the first person rather than in the third person?  I would write it like this:

"I was born in the city of Shiraz, Iran in 1954.  I began my academic studies in the United Kingdom (U.K.) at Dudley Technical College.  I earned my first degree in Mathematics and Statistics from Polytechnic of North London, and my second degree in Numerical Analysis from Brunel University. After obtaining an MPhil in Applied Mathematics from Iran's Polytechnic University, I was appointed Professor of Mathematics at Iran's IAU [what's this?].

In 1993, I applied at the U.K.'s Open University, acquiring a Ph.D. in Numerical Analysis during this year[?]. My research interests include numerical solution of ODE’s[what's this?]. , differential equations and integral equations as well as DAE [what's this?]. and spectral methods.

 Since 1993, I have published eight successful books in the area of mathematics . The immense popularity of my books is [a result?] of more than 30 years of educational experience, and a result of my accessible style of writing, as well as a broad coverage of well laid out and is easy to follow subjects. [rework this sentence] My books on calculus, differential equations and advanced engineering, are considered reference material in several renown universities in Iran (including SUA[spell this out], the country's most prestigous private university). Currently, I serve as a IAU [spell this out] board member at in Iran."
 

This last paragraph is really rough.  I think you might want to rewrite it.  Don't use initials for companies/schools as you have here.  Write for your readers who may not know what these letters stand for. 

 My two cents here.  Good luck!

  
X_Fred  #514277  Fri, 16 May 08 03:48 AM
as the title indicates, this a biography, which means it should be written in the third person.

I intend to put this short biography on a website. SUA will be linked to the university's website, and let's just forget about spelling out the other acronyms.

 

and the part you recommended me to rework is actually where i need you guys' help with. 

 

Thank you for the reply.

  
X_Fred  #514281  Fri, 16 May 08 04:09 AM
by the way, if in a certain university students be advised to get certain books for particular courses, those book are called "reference books" , right? i have a feeling i'm wrong:d how should i put it?

 

his books on calculus, differential equations and advanced engineering, are considered reference books in several renown universities in..

 or

his books on calculus, differential equations and advanced engineering, are considered standard coursebooks in several renown universities in..

 or ...?

  
Anonymous  #561062  Mon, 01 Sep 08 02:19 PM
hy from firs reading point impretion, biography sounds well. good luck!
  
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