ESL General English Grammar Questions

Re: Writing (1)

Tung Quoc — Thu, 26 Oct 2006 12:14:44 GMT

Very sorry. I've realized now you're right.

So please correct this paragraph and if possible, tell me why I am wrong.If I write a/b , that means both are possible and interchangeable in this context. Thanks

Government's April meeting: Announcing the targets and capital/targets and capital for people to decide and supervise.

The April's socio-economic growth/ The April socio-economic growth has remained/preserved/keeped/stayed the same as that of the first 3 months. The industrial production/industrial production had fairly high growth and step by step resumed the previous growth pace/the growth pace before/the growth pace earlier.However, many problems haven't been overcome: The basic construction investment capital,especially the state credit capital, has been low, the investment demand stimulation measures haven't been done strongly so the efficiency/ the effectiveness has been limited, the consumption prices and services have decreased and will be to decrease in next few month. It was the remark/were the remarks of the Planning and Investment minister at this meeting.

Quoc

PS:

1/You wrote:

efficiency - how well something works while it's happening

effectiveness - how good the end results are

Could you tell me more clear?

2/ Planning and Investment Ministry. Right?

3/ You wrote: 'The' next few months as they are specific months.

But I think we don't know exactly what months they are.So can I write next few months? Why ?

Re: Writing (1)

nona the brit — Thu, 26 Oct 2006 11:25:54 GMT

Ok, but it won't fix all the errors in this piece of writing.

The April's socio-economic growth has remained the same as that of the first 3 months. Industrial production had fairly high production and step by step resumed the previous growth pace.However, many problems haven't been overcome: The basic construction investment capital,especially the state credit capital, has been low, the investment demand stimulation measures haven't been done strongly so the efficiency has been limited, the consumption prices and services have decreased and will be to decrease in next few month. It was the remark of the Planning and Investment minister at this meeting.

1/Is it obligatory to write the before targets,industrial production and next few few months?Why? I can't find 'targets'. No 'the' before industrial production as it is just industry in general. 'The' next few months as they are specific months.

2/April's socio-economic growth (1)= April socio-economic growth (2) ?If not, what is wrong? Why? April's - the growth belongs to April. See my previous comment about the 'the'.

3/the previous growth pace (3) =the growth pace before (4)= the growth pace earlier? (5)If not, what is wrong? Why? The previous rate of growth is better. Pace just doesn't really work with growth.

4/Do you write efficiency or effectiveness here? Why?What is the difference in meaning btw them? See my previous comment.

5/Do remained and preserved have the same meaning and are they interchangeable?If not, what is the difference in meaning btw them? No they are not interchangeable here.

6/Do you write Planning and Investment minister or Plan and Investment minister ? Why? Planning and Investment Minister. He/she is in charge of planning, not plans.

7/In state credit capital, is state an uncountable noun? depends. Are you talking of the credit capital available in the state (non-count) or something called 'State Credit Capital' (count)

8/Do you write it was the remark or it were the remarks here? This whole sentence doesn't make sense. Do you mean that the whole of the paragraph is his remarks? Then 'Those were the remarks of.... It would be better to state this at the beginning though 'At the meeting, the minister remarked that......

9/ Is limited an adjectif or a verb used in the passive? AJECTIVE adjecectIVE adjectIVE adjectIVE. You always misspell this - it's a bad habit you need to break. However, not sure which it is, sorry.

10/Do you write The basic construction investment capital or The basic constructional investment capiatal ? Why?What is the difference btw them? Basic construction investment capital (no the). The capital is to be used for construction, not used for constructional. If you use constructional then it is saying that the investment capital in someway constructs something directly. Money doesn't construct things. It may pay for materials and labour to construct things, but it isn't out there digging holes and pouring concrete itself.

12/ Is there comma after so? No comma.

Re: Writing (1)

Tung Quoc — Thu, 26 Oct 2006 10:24:59 GMT

Thanks but it's diffilcult to read.

If you have time, please answer question by question.

Re: Writing (1)

nona the brit — Thu, 26 Oct 2006 09:54:21 GMT

It might be easier if you just post your writing and ask for comments about it, as although you wish to query a few specific points, there are other problems in your writing which you have not addressed. For example with question 2 you have queried April/April's but not the fact that the 'the' is incorrect. It's rather difficult to both work through your questions and comment effectively on the whole text. So, here's my comments and suggestions for you.

Government's April meeting: Announcing targets and capital for people to (decide and supervise - these two words do not make sense here).

(The- delete 'the) April's socio-economic growth has remained the same as that of the first 3 months of the year. Industrial production had fairly high production (production had high production sounds rather odd. and step by step resumed the previous growth pace (what pace are you comparing to? You've only mentioned the previous 3 months and stated that growth has been the same).However, many problems haven't been overcome: (The - delete 'the') basic construction investment capital,especially the state credit capital, has been low, (the- delete 'the') investment demand stimulation measures haven't been done strongly(clumsy phrasing) so the effectiveness has been limited, the (delete -the) consumption prices and services have decreased and will decrease further in the next few months. It was the remark of the Planning and Investment minister at this meeting.(doesn't make sense.What was his remark?)

efficiency - how well something works while it's happening

effectiveness - how good the end results are

Writing (1)

Tung Quoc — Thu, 26 Oct 2006 09:41:31 GMT

Please read:

Government's April meeting: Announcing targets and capital for people to decide and supervise.

In this context:

1/Is it obligatory to write the before targets,industrial production and next few few months?Why?

2/April's socio-economic growth (1)= April socio-economic growth (2) ?If not, what is wrong? Why?

3/the previous growth pace (3) =the growth pace before (4)= the growth pace earlier? (5)If not, what is wrong? Why?

4/Do you write efficiency or effectiveness here? Why?What is the difference in meaning btw them?

5/Do remained and preserved have the same meaning and are they interchangeable?If not, what is the difference in meaning btw them?

6/Do you write Planning and Investment minister or Plan and Investment minister ? Why?

7/In state credit capital, is state an uncountable noun?

8/Do you write it was the remark or it were the remarks here?

9/ Is limited an adjectif or a verb used in the passive?

10/Do you write The basic construction investment capital or The basic constructional investment capiatal ? Why?What is the difference btw them?

12/ Is there comma after so?

Thanks