ESL General English Grammar Questions

Re: Please, help me (To Clive)

Anonymous — Thu, 01 May 2008 03:41:12 GMT

Hi Clive,

Ok. Thank you very much!.

Best wishes,

Anon.

P.S.; In fact I think the correct is "international scene" because the word scenery refers to theater, isn't

Re: Please, help me (To Clive)

Clive — Thu, 01 May 2008 03:28:57 GMT

Hi,

I * rewrote the sentence below you said it was unclear. Could you, please tell me if it's Ok now?

2.c) "This chapter besides a brief study of the prejudice with regard to homosexual in the course of the history, with approach in the equality principle, it's shown up the acceptance of gay union in the international scenery." The first part of this sentence needs a verb, but the whole thing needs rewriting because it is unclear. Consider changingit to more than one sentence.

* Sentence: In the following chapter,the acceptance ~~to of~~ the homosexual union is shown up in(probably 'by' instead of 'in') the international scenery and in the Brazilian juridical system. There is also a brief study of the prejudice with regard to the homosexual in the course of ~~the~~ history, with approach in the equality principle.

How does 'scenery' show acceptance of homosexual unions? I wonder if you mean 'in the international scene'?

I don't understand what with approach in the equality principle means. You need to say it another way.

Now please, tell me, if I send you the whole text (it's a summary of four paragraphs only), would you mind take a look and see if everything is Ok? Post it if you like. I'll have a look if I have time. If not, perhaps someone else will.

Best wishes, Clive

Please, help me (To Clive)

Anonymous — Wed, 30 Apr 2008 16:32:08 GMT

Hi Clive,

I * rewrote the sentence below you said it was unclear. Could you, please tell me if it's Ok now?

2.c) "This chapter besides a brief study of the prejudice with regard to homosexual in the course of the history, with approach in the equality principle, it's shown up the acceptance of gay union in the international scenery." The first part of this sentence needs a verb, but the whole thing needs rewirtiting because it is unclear. Consider changingit to more than one sentence.

* Sentence: In the following chapter,the acceptance to the homosexual union is shown up in the international scenery and in Brazilian juridical system, besides there is also a brief study of the prejudice with regard to the homosexual in the course of the history, with approach in the equality principle. Now please, tell me, if I send you the whole text (it's a summary of four paragraphs only), would you mind take a look and see if everything is Ok? Because I have a summary of a monograph to hand in and I really need help!!!Thank you very much in advance,Anon