ESL General English Grammar Questions

Re: Kindly check my para

Creativeguru — Tue, 13 May 2008 07:19:06 GMT

That's a beautiful concept and straight towards the target audience, and that is the right way to promote such products modular kitchens and all. Thanks for sharing such a powerful concept and please there is nothing for apologizing so strict instruction(a small request) donât use such words ever!

Re: Kindly check my para

Grammar Geek — Mon, 12 May 2008 17:54:02 GMT

CG, by way of apology, let me offer you an alternative approach.

What about recognzing that women today have a lot going on. Between their jobs at the office, and driving their kids arounds, and doing their part to keep the house in order, the last thing they need is a cramped, disorganized kitchen that makes their life harder. Designed by women who know what it's like to juggle career, kids, housework and self, this kitchen ... etc., etc.

Re: Kindly check my para

Creativeguru — Mon, 12 May 2008 17:48:29 GMT

Thanks a lot Grammar Geek indeed its our class project where I have to promote the modular kitchen and our guide told us that no one knows kitchen better than a woman. Indeed same though what you had mentioned popped up in my mind also but I just ignored and worked on the content. But now I will definitely put forward these points in front of class. Indeed today's woman no longer wants a tag of the 'queen of kitchen that's true.Thanks for your valuable time for such a wonder explanation

Re: Kindly check my para

Grammar Geek — Mon, 12 May 2008 16:19:01 GMT

Your grammar is okay.

I think you will annoy a lot of your potential customers by referring repeatedly to the kitchen as a woman's domain. I will not redefine my lifestyle because I suddently have more drawer space than I did. The kitchen does not define me.

Understanding a woman's needs sounds more like the bedroom than the kitchen, and I'm sure many experts in industrial engineering and motion studies will disagree that only a woman can understand how to make an efficient kitchen.

And honestly, it makes me feel inferior. In my kitchen, everything is NOT in its place. These women you write about may have a perfectly oranized kitchen, but most mothers who also work outside the home do not. You can say that with spacious drawers and cabinet, we've designed a kitchen that allows you to create a place for everything.

And finally, what is "design" if not the combinatin of "utility" and "style"?

EDIT: In rereading my comments, I realize how overly harsh I sound, and that was not my intention. I realize that you're writing in a second language and I'm applying the same level of criticism I would be to a domestically produced ad. As an exercise in English, what you have here is good work.

Re: Kindly check my para

Creativeguru — Mon, 12 May 2008 09:47:36 GMT

Kindly check I rephrased it

Being women, we know exactly what makes a good kitchen, and what all the utensils and appliances should be. Our kitchens are well organized; everything is in its place, and cabinets and drawers are spacious. We are committed to providing the best kitchen in terms of utility, design and style to refine your cooking experience and redefine your lifestyle. After all, only a woman understands a woman's needs.

Re: Kindly check my para

Mister Micawber — Fri, 09 May 2008 12:08:52 GMT

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I have underlined some problem areas:

Being women we know exactly what make up a good kitchen. What all utensils, appliances should in the kitchen. Also, we want a well organized, everything should be in its place, spacious drawers and cabins, . We committed to providing the best kitchen in terms of utility, design and style that refines your cooking experience and redefine your lifestyle. After all only a woman understands a womanâs needs.

Kindly check my para

Creativeguru — Fri, 09 May 2008 04:37:17 GMT

Kindly check for style of writing and grammar, if needed please rephrase whereevr required,

Being women we know exactly what make up a good kitchen. What all utensils, appliances should in the kitchen. Also, we want a well organized, everything should be in its place, spacious drawers and cabins, . We committed to providing the best kitchen in terms of utility, design and style that refines your cooking experience and redefine your lifestyle. After all only a woman understands a womanâs needs.