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Anonymous — Sat, 10 May 2008 10:56:12 GMT

Anti- Obsessive Love

In the ocean of your eyes,
I'd have liked to drown voluntarily.
Everytime I looked at you
I seemed to have drowned even deeper and deeper.
I might had ever reached the bottom of your heart?
I might..
When you looked into my eyes you saw
my ocean full of raspacious manic love for you...

Desolated streets, greyish sky
limitless silence and the unbearable agony
which reminds me of the abandoning fact
you were to be the light of my life
to which I wanted to give all my love.
Innocent tears of obsessive love, the dangerous kind
desired to that one look of you which
couldn't express: I love you

There falls a dark shadow
on the light of a sunny day.
There comes a wave
of sadness and takes all my happiness away.
I see the leaves fly away dreary,
Even the breeze
doesn't give me any message.
No one thinking of me.
She didn't abandon me out of her life.
I was just never present in it.
That's how my life ends like a dark shadow
Falling on the light of a sunny day.

Alphabetically that was what would have supposed to happen, right?
Being obsessively in love, the dangerous kind, which once is tasted will
haunt you forever, all-consuming and ends in tears and everlasting misery.

I passed over that part, rewriting my story with a happy end and a
life lesson to be learned: You don't need to be in love to be happy.
I'm not and surviving perfectly.

Written by Faisal Syed V3B

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