Re: please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(

Mister Micawber — Thu, 15 May 2008 04:55:28 GMT

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Dance is my favorite sport

Ever since I was a little girl dance has always been my favorite sport. When I was three, I would put glitter on my face and run around the house twirling. Dance is and has always been my passion. Maybe it’s [avoid contractions] the control of the dancer’s body to execute each move flawlessly that enraptures me? Or it could be the look on the dancers’ face that says they’re loving what they’re doing? Either way ~~I absolutely love dance.~~ It brings such joy to so many people, both the person dancing and the people watching.

Some people may disagree and say “dance is not a sport!” But I say it is. Sports require pushing your ~~physical~~ body to reach it’s maximum performance level. Just as body-builders mush exercise and prepare their bodies, dancers must also. Body-builders ~~and muscle-men~~ have large, bulky, and strong muscles because of the foods they eat and the work-outs they do; dancers have long, lean, and strong muscles because they do different work-outs than body-builders.

Dance is great! However it still has some issues that come with it. It costs a lot of money to get good training, you may acquire a lot of injuries due to mistakes or improper stretching, and it is A LOT of work just to be good at it. Even though it is a lot of work with a lot of risks, I believe that its’ good outweighs the bad. You learn life lessons from dance class and from your dance teacher.

Dance has helped me in a lot of areas; I am very athletic, strong, and I have high self esteem. I am encouraged now more than ever to try my best in class, at competitions, and in life in general. I remember the day I bought my first pair of Pointe shoes. They were so perfect and pretty. I can still see my face [in the mirror??] lit up with joy. Every time I go to dance class I’m taken back to that moment where nothing else mattered but mastering the art of ballet.

~~So in conclusion,~~ dance is a perfect example of everything I want to be when I’m older: Strong, beautiful, hopeful, and absolutely perfect. I know I’m not completely those things now, but I can strive to become them as I get older. And that is why dance is my favorite sport.

please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(

lizz01 — Thu, 15 May 2008 03:15:12 GMT

Dance is my favorite sport

Ever since I was a little girl dance has always been my favorite sport. When I was three, I would put glitter on my face and run around the house twirling. Dance is and has always been my passion. Maybe it’s the control of the dancer’s body to execute each move flawlessly that enraptures me? Or it could be the look on the dancers’ face that says they’re loving what they’re doing? Either way I absolutely love dance. It brings such joy to so many people, both the person dancing and the people watching.

Some people may disagree and say “dance is not a sport!” But I say it is. Sports require pushing your physical body to reach it’s maximum performance level. Just as body-builders mush exercise and prepare their bodies, dancers must also. Body-builders and muscle-men have large, bulky, and strong muscles because of the foods they eat and the work-outs they do; dancers have long, lean, and strong muscles because they do different work-outs than body-builders.

Dance has helped me in a lot of areas; I am very athletic, strong, and I have high self esteem. I am encouraged now more than ever to try my best in class, at competitions, and in life in general. I remember the day I bought my first pair of Pointe shoes. They were so perfect and pretty. I can still see my face lit up with joy. Every time I go to dance class I’m taken back to that moment where nothing else mattered but mastering the art of ballet.

So in conclusion, dance is a perfect example of everything I want to be when I’m older: Strong, beautiful, hopeful, and absolutely perfect. I know I’m not completely those things now, but I can strive to become them as I get older. And that is why dance is my favorite sport.

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Re: please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(

please check my essay on "dance is my favorite sport" it's due tomorrow:(