ESL General English Grammar Questions

Re: organize a trip

Tuongvan — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 23:31:57 GMT

Thank you ever so much Mr Wordy . Your edit is great.

Best wishes

Re: organize a trip

Mr Wordy — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 23:00:17 GMT

You have problems with spacing around punctuation, and you have spurious double spaces in a number of places. I have corrected these below.

The other changes that I made to the date formats are not because what you had was wrong, but just to make them all consistent.

Dear colleagues,

This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200 km ~~away~~ ["away" is not necessarily wrong, but I think the sentence reads better without it] from the city center. Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by February 15, 2008.

The trip is scheduled to leave for Mui Ne Beach [comma deleted] on July 15, 2008 and ~~come back~~ return ["come back" is not wrong, but I think "return" is better] to the city on March 5, 2008. [The return date is earlier than the departure date!]

Thank you in advance.

organize a trip

Tuongvan — Fri, 27 Jun 2008 22:29:05 GMT

Hi teachers,
Could you please edit the following for me?:

Dear colleages,

This year the company is to organize a vacation trip for all employees to Mui Ne Beach, about 200km away from the city center .Those who would like to join the trip should register with Miss Perry by Feb.15th ,2008 .

The trip is scheduled to leave for Mui Ne Beach, on July.15, 2008 and come back to the city on March 5th , 2008 .

Thank you in advance