http://www.englishforums.com/English/GeneralEnglishGrammarQuestions/Forum12.htmAsk your questions on grammar and get your sentence checked. We answer lots of different types of general English grammar questions here.enCSMOD (Build: 3273.32735)http://www.englishforums.com/English/ShortQuickCorrection/mxmj/post.htm#63215Fri, 24 Dec 2004 10:16:00 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:63215Mister Micawber0http://www.englishforums.com/English/ShortQuickCorrection/mxmj/post.htm#63215http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments12-63215.xml<br />It is bad form to mention excuses-- 'the cv initial submission process through "monster" system didn't seem to work'-- and it is also bad form to be even marginally pushy-- 'in the process of assessing'-- in this situation. It is he who is 'kindly', not you! Don't make the Christmas wishes so obvious. 'Best regards' is too informal here. It needs to be consistently formal (don't abbreviate): <br /> <br />'Dear Mr. xxxx, <br /> <br />If I may, I would like to follow up and ask if you have received my curriculum vitae and whether my initial submission is in order. <br /> <br />Wishing you a Merry Christmas, I am <br /> <br />Sincerely yours, ' <br /> <br />http://www.englishforums.com/English/ShortQuickCorrection/mxwh/post.htmThu, 23 Dec 2004 23:24:46 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:63145Guest1http://www.englishforums.com/English/ShortQuickCorrection/mxwh/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments12-63145.xmlHi there, I just wanted to know your impression and probable corrections to the below follow up email I sent to a headhunter in my job hunting process: <br /> <br />--------------------------------------------------------------------------------- <br />Dear Mr xxxx, <br /> <br />Given that the cv initial submission process through "monster" system didn't seem to work couple of weeks ago and I just could send you my cv this week, just wanted to follow up and kindly ask if you had succesfully received it and in the process of assessing. <br /> <br />I'd also like to take the advantage and wish you a Merry Christmas, <br /> <br />With best regards, <br /> <br />yyyyyy <br /> <br />---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- <br /> <br />...bluntly, good/bad/acceptable impression? <br /> <br />Thanks in advance