http://www.englishforums.com/English/SongWritingLyrics/Forum18.htmR&B, Pop, Hip-Hop, Rock and some roll.enXMOD (Build: 3715.30106)http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#698266Sat, 19 Sep 2009 21:32:30 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:698266PTsniper0http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#698266http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-698266.xmlBasketball is not really my sport, but I'll try. You make them whoop when you shoot a hoop reads a little bit better. The last verse 'with a pair of jeans' doesn't really hit the spot, in my opinion, but I'm no song writer. Perhaps, you could focus more on describing the girl and a little less on the basketball, using just a few lyrics using sports terms to remind the listener, occassionally, that she is a player. Don't give up, keep trying. I'm sure none of the greats managed to master the art immediately. Alright, thank you so much for the answer, finally someone told me something I wanted to hear, and you managed to give advices and still be nice to me :D. I'll...http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#698170Sat, 19 Sep 2009 21:32:31 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:698170Adrenochrome1http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#698170http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-698170.xmlBasketball is not really my sport, but I'll try. You make them whoop when you shoot a hoop reads a little bit better. The last verse 'with a pair of jeans' doesn't really hit the spot, in my opinion, but I'm no song writer. Perhaps, you could focus more on describing the girl and a little less on the basketball, using just a few lyrics using sports terms to remind the listener, occassionally, that she is a player. Don't give up, keep trying. I'm sure none of the greats managed to master the art immediately.http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697477Sun, 19 Jul 2009 21:32:31 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:697477MrPedantic2http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697477http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-697477.xmlI would be wary of basketball metaphors. The sport seems to lend itself to inadvertent innuendo. MrPhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697437Wed, 19 Aug 2009 21:32:31 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:697437PTsniper3http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697437http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-697437.xmlLol Believe me, I wouldn't quit if I had one...http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697287Sun, 19 Jul 2009 21:32:31 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:697287Mister Micawber4http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htm#697287http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-697287.xml. My honest opinion: lame. Don't quit your day job. .http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htmSat, 19 Sep 2009 21:32:31 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:697249PTsniper5http://www.englishforums.com/English/RhymingProblemsSuggestions/wzpkl/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments18-697249.xmlHi there. Ok, here's the deal: I like writing lyrics (only lyrics, because I can't match my lyrics to my guitar playing...), and I decided to write one just for fun. The theme is about a girl (like a perfect girl) and basketball. So, the girl is not only beautiful but is a great player as well. I have written a few lines and rhymes alredy, but it turns out to be more difficult than I expected to be because I have to make a connection between the basketball movements (such as: fade away, lay up, tripple, crossover, you see wthat I mean..) and the reactions that the boys (audience) have. Notice that everytime I say them/their/they, I'm talking about the "boys". Just to give you an example of what I've been...