ESL, Formal, General & Business Letter Writing (English language)

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Wed, 23 Aug 2006 09:42:15 GMT

Thanks one more time Nife, you are very helpful and friendly.

Have a wonderful day.

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Nef — Tue, 22 Aug 2006 21:54:10 GMT

A colleague we and I developed an application that managed all the activities of a GSM maintenance workshop: The IDE used was the VB.Net and we chose ORACLE as DBSM.

'A colleague and I...'

(no 'we')

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Tue, 22 Aug 2006 12:15:01 GMT

Hi everybody,

Thanks a lot Nef for your effort, your comments were very usefull I keeped them in mind and helped me to improve my cv.

This is the new one, may be it needs more work, if anybody has any comment I would be happy to hear from him/her.

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OBJECTIVE

I am looking for a professional masterâs program where I have the opportunity to gain a deeper empirical knowledge related to of the communication and networking field. My aim is to be part of a team of a big Italian company specializing in the networking and communication field, C.

EDUCATION

2002 â 2006 Faculty of Economic Sciences & Management (Bachelor in Computer Sciences Applied for Management: 4 years).

1994 â 2002 *************** secondary school (Baccalaureate of State : Mathematics field)

1988 â 1994 Primary school ***************

English: Very good. In fact I am preparing for the TOEFL exam at AMIDEAST and I am going to take it on September 1^st.An email will be sent to you at imcne@sssup.it with results.

Italian : Bene, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano al Istituito Italiano Di Cultura (livello iniziale e livello intermedio).

French: Very good.

WORK EXPERIENCE

February â May 2006

* I did my last yearâs project at the CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique) and I enjoyed it a lot. It was a rich experience with a very qualified team, where I was involved in an interesting networking and communication project using Java, TCP/IP and SMS technologies (please look at the enclosed report for more details).

Summer 2005 (June - August)

* A colleague we and I developed an application that managed all the activities of a GSM maintenance workshop: The IDE used was the VB.Net and we chose ORACLE as DBSM.

July â August 2004

* It was a good experience working at the CNSS (Caisse National de SÃ©curitÃ© Sociale, which can be translated in English to "National Fund of Social Security", where I was a member of its IT team.

ACADEMIC & WORKING BACKGROUNDS

* Network management / Data transmission (LAN-WAN): Advanced academic knowledge + Hard working work experience (It was the topic of my last year project: a Java application developed under Linux to remotely survey the Local Network's components using communication technologies).

* Software development / Programming (Java, C, C++, VB.Net): Academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was developed with Java under Linux Suse).

Advanced theoretical and empirical knowledge of operation systems: process conflict, memory management, data storing, network configuration, users and groups management â¦

Web development (php, MySQL, HTML, XML, Java script, some web administration tools such as: PhpMyAdmin): academic knowledge + personal effort: development of the AIESEC University Local Community web site for the year 2003 and of my own web site.

* System analysis and design (UML and MERISE ----- Rational Rose 2005, UMBRELLO and Power AMC 10): academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was designed using UML on UMBRELLO, the most famous open source software running under Linux).

* DBMS (Oracle 9i, 10g under both Windows and Linux, MySQL 5 also under Windows and Linux): academic knowledge + work experience (I worked on Oracle during my first internship and on MySQL 5 in my last year project).

* Financial management: academic knowledge.

* General and analytic accounting: academic knowledge.

* Corporate Economics: academic knowledge. (

* Probability and Statistics: academic knowledge.

* Organization theories (very important courses about organization of the work): academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

* Human resources management: academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

SKILLS

* Professional Skills: Leadership skills, Work in group.

* Management skills: Project management (Planning, sponsoring, preparing, presenting)

* Personal Skills & Knowledge: Open mind, easy going, ambitious and reliable.

ASSOCIATIVE LIFE

* Organizations: Active member at of AIESEC* and Co-Vice President of Information System & Communication for the 2003/2OO4 mandate.

* WWW activities: Member at aiesec.net community, insatech.com, securitynets.net, linuxforum.com and very active on MiRc especially on networking, Linux and security chat rooms â¦.

INTERESTS

* Travelling: I love travelling a lot, I love discovering many other new cultures.

* Computer Sciences: Networking, IS security, Linux, all the new technologies in general.

* Sport: Tennis and swimming.

REFERENCES

*********** PhD (operating system) *********

Mr *********** Network engineer at the CNI ***************

Mr *********** Network engineer at the C

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Nef — Tue, 22 Aug 2006 10:54:34 GMT

Here are my ideas. This does seem fairly long to me. Maybe it's possible to have less detail in some sections. (I was not trying to change your formatting/spacing. Please disregard any changes in that area.)

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OBJECTIVE

I am looking for a professional masterâs program where I have the opportunity to gain a deeper empirical knowledge ~~related to~~ of the communication and networking field. My aim is to be part of a team of a big Italian company specializeding in the networking and communication field. (communication? or communications?)

EDUCATION

2002 â 2006 Faculty of eEconomic Sciences & Management (Bachelor in Computer Sciences Applied for Management: 4 years). (Iâm confused by "Faculty ofâ¦" because "faculty" often means the teaching staff. Is "Faculty of Economic Sciences & Management" the most exact translation of your school's name?)

1994 â 2002 *************** secondary school (Baccalaureate of sState : Mathematics field)

1988 â 1994 Primary school ***************

English: Very good. In fact I am preparing for the TOEFL exam at AMIDEAST and I am going to take it on September 1^st. ~~thus~~ aAn email will be sent to you at imcne@sssup.it with results.

Italian : Bene, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano al Istituito Italiano Di Cultura (livello iniziale e livello intermedio).

French: Very good.

WORK EXPERIENCE

February â May 2006

* (During that period of four months-- You already specified February - May 2006. Is this needed here??) I was doing did my last yearâs project at the CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique) and ~~tremendously~~ I enjoyed it a lot. It was a rich experience with a very qualified team, where I was involved in an interesting networking and communication project using Java, TCP/IP and SMS technologies (please look at the enclosed report for more details).

Summer 2005 (June - August)

* ~~With the cooperation of a~~ A colleague we and I developed an application that managed all the activities of a GSM maintenance workshop: The IDE used was the VB.Net and we (have choose??) chose? ORACLE as DBSM.

July â August 2004

* It was a good experience working at the CNSS (Caisse National de SÃ©curitÃ© Sociale, wich which can be translated in English to: National Fund of Social Security), where I was a member of its IT team. for a couple of months. (You already specified July - August 2004, so I don't think you need "for a couple of months")

ACADEMIC & WORKING BACKGROUNDS

* Network management / Data transmission (LAN-WAN): Advanced academic knowledge + ~~Hard working~~ work experience (It was the topic of my last year project: A a Java application developed under Linux aim to survey the Local Network's components using communication technologies).

* Software development / Programming (Java, C, C++, VB.Net): Academic knowledge + work~~ing~~ experience (my last year project was developed with Java under Linux Suse).

Advanced theoretical and empirical knowledge of operation systems: process conflict, memory management, data storing, network configuration, users and groups management â¦

* System analysis and design (UML and MERISE ----- Rational Rose 2005, UMBRELLO and Power AMC 10): academic knowledge + work~~ing~~ experience (my last year project was designed using UML on UMBRELLO:, the most famous open source software running under Linux).

* DBMS (Oracle 9i, 10g under both Windows and Linux, MySQL 5 also under Windows and Linux): academic knowledge + work experience working (I worked on Oracle during my first internship and on MySQL 5 in my last year project).

* Financial management: academic knowledge.

* General and analytic accounting: academic knowledge.

* Economy of companies: academic knowledge. (Economy of Companies?? Corporate Economics??)

* Probability and Statistics: academic knowledge.

* Organization theories (very important courses about organization of the work): academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

* Human resources management: academic knowledge + associat~~ive~~ed experience at AIESEC*.

SKILLS

* Professional Skills: Leadership skills, Work in group.

* Management skills: Project management (Planning, sponsoring, preparing, presenting)

* Personal Skills & Knowledge: Open mind, easy going, ambitious and reliable. My driver licence is clean for more than five years (since Mai 2001). (Is there a particular reason to include the information about your driverâs license here? To me, it seems out of place here.)

ASSOCIATIVE LIFE

* Organizations: Active member at of AIESEC* and Co-Vice President of?? Information System & Communication for the 2003/2OO4 mandate.

* WWW activities: Member at aiesec.net community, insatech.com, securitynets.net, linuxforum.com and very active on MiRc especially on networking, Linux and security chat rooms â¦.

INTERESTS

* Travelling: I love travelling a lot, I love discovering many other new cultures.

* Computer Sciences: Networking, IS security, Linux, all the new technologies in general.

* Sport: Tennis and swimming.

REFERENCES

Mr ***********, PhD (If you say "John Smith, PhD", you donât use "Mr." in front of "John") (operating system) *********

Mr *********** Network engineer at the CNI ***************

Mr *********** Network engineer at the C

AIESEC, the world's largest student organization, is the international platform for young people to discover and develop their potential so as to have a positive impact on society. In addition to providing over 5,000 leadership positions and delivering over 350 conferences , AIESEC also runs an exchange program that enables over 3,500 students and recent graduates the opportunity to live and work in another country. (I noticed that this text is directly from the website. Iâd suggest using other words and giving less information about AIESEC here in the reference section. Also, the bold text is excellent for the website, but seems surprising in the reference section. )
For further information please do not hesitate to visit these URLs: www.aiesec.org.

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Mon, 21 Aug 2006 15:45:48 GMT

Hi everybody ,

I'm still waiting for your comments and advices, really I need them as soon as possible, in fact I have to send this CV with other documents in the neer futer.

Thanks a lot.

Sincerely yours.

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Sat, 19 Aug 2006 21:48:51 GMT

Hi everybody;

This is the last version:

OBJECTIVE

I am looking for a professional master program where I have the opportunity to gain a deeper empirical knowledge related to communication and network field. My aim is to be part of a team of a big Italian company specialized in the networking and communication field.

EDUCATION

2002 â 2006 Faculty of economic Sciences & Management (Bachelor in Computer Sciences Applied for Management: 4 years).

1994 â 2002 *************** secondary school (Baccalaureate of state : Mathematics field)

1988 â 1994 Primary school ***************

English: Very good. In fact I am preparing for the TOEFL exam at AMIDEAST and I am going to take it on September 1st, thus an email will be sent to you at imcne@sssup.it with results.

Italian : Bene, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano al Istituito Italiano Di Cultura (livello iniziale e livello intermedio).

French: Very good.

WORK EXPERIENCE

February â May 2006

* During that period of four months I was doing my last year project at the CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique), tremendously I enjoyed it a lot, it was a rich experience with a very qualified team where I was involved in an interesting networking and communication project using Java, TCP/IP and SMS technologies (please look at the enclosed report for more details).

Summer 2005 (June - August)

* With the cooperation of a colleague we developed an application that manage all the activities of a GSM maintenance workshop: The IDE used was the VB.Net and we have choose ORACLE as DBSM.

July â August 2004

* It was a good experience working at the CNSS (Caisse National de SÃ©curitÃ© Sociale wich can be translated in English to: National Fund of Social Security) where I was a member of its IT team for a couple of months.

ACADEMIC & WORKING BACKGROUNDS

* Network management / Data transmission (LAN-WAN): Advanced academic knowledge + Hard working experience (It was the topic of my last year project: A Java application developed under Linux aim to survey the Local Network's components using communication technologies).

* Software development / Programming (Java, C, C++, VB.Net): Academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was developed with Java under Linux Suse).

Advanced theoretical and empirical knowledge of operation systems: process conflict, memory management, data storing, network configuration, users and groups management â¦

* System analysis and design (UML and MERISE ----- Rational Rose 2005, UMBRELLO and Power AMC 10): academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was designed using UML on UMBRELLO: the most famous open source software running under Linux).

* DBMS (Oracle 9i, 10g under both Windows and Linux, MySQL 5 also under Windows and Linux): academic knowledge + experience working (I worked on Oracle during my first internship and on MySQL 5 in my last year project).

* Financial management: academic knowledge.

* General and analytic accounting: academic knowledge.

* Economy of companies: academic knowledge.

* Probability and Statistics: academic knowledge.

* Organization theories (very important courses about organization of the work): academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

* Human resources management: academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

SKILLS

* Professional Skills: Leadership skills, Work in group.

* Management skills: Project management (Planning, sponsoring, preparing, presenting)

* Personal Skills & Knowledge: Open mind, easy going, ambitious and reliable. My driver licence is clean for more than five years (since Mai 2001).

ASSOCIATIVE LIFE

* Organizations: Active member at AIESEC* Co-Vice President Information System & Communication for the 2003/2OO4 mandate.

* WWW activities: Member at aiesec.net community, insatech.com, securitynets.net, linuxforum.com and very active on MiRc especially on networking, Linux and security chat rooms â¦.

INTERESTS

* Travelling: I love travelling a lot, I love discovering many other new cultures.

* Computer Sciences: Networking, IS security, Linux, all the new technologies in general.

* Sport: Tennis and swimming.

REFERENCES

Mr *********** PhD (operating system) *********

Mr *********** Network engineer at the CNI ***************

Mr *********** Network engineer at the C

* AIESEC, the world's largest student organization, is the international platform for young people to discover and develop their potential so as to have a positive mpact on society. In addition to providing over 5,000 leadership positions and delivering over 350 conferences , AIESEC also runs an exchange program that enables over 3,500 students and recent graduates the opportunity to live and work in another country.

For further information please do not hesitate to visit these URLs: www.aiesec.org.

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Sat, 19 Aug 2006 15:12:23 GMT

Tnanks for your remark, I will take it in consideration.

Have a wonderful day.

Sincerely yours.

Re: My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Francesca — Sat, 19 Aug 2006 13:06:23 GMT

Hello, I'm not so good at english but let me give you an advice for the sentence about my language:

Lifeengineer wrote:

Italian : Bene, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano al Istituito Italiano Di Cultura (livello iniziale e livello intermedio).

It's better you write:

Italian : Buono, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano all' Istituito Italiano Di Cultura

Cheers

My cv is waiting for your admission ...............

Lifeengineer — Sat, 19 Aug 2006 12:36:43 GMT

hi everybody,

I want to have your advices and remarqs before sending this cv, thanks for your time.

OBJECTIVE

EDUCATION

2002 â 2006 Faculty of economic Sciences & Management (Bachelor in Computer Sciences Applied for Management: 4 years).

1994 â 2002 *************** secondary school (Baccalaureate of state : Mathematics field)

1988 â 1994 Primary school ***************

English: Very good. In fact I am preparing for the TOEFL exam at AMIDEAST and I am going to take it on September 1st, thus an email will be sent to you at imcne@sssup.it with results.

Italian : Bene, ho frequentato due corsi di italiano al Istituito Italiano Di Cultura (livello iniziale e livello intermedio).

French: Very good.

WORK EXPERIENCE

February â May 2006

During that period of four months I was doing my last year project at the CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique), tremendously I enjoyed it a lot, it was a rich experience with a very qualified team where I was involved in an interesting networking and communication project using Java, TCP/IP and SMS technologies (please look at the enclosed report for more details).

Summer 2005 (June - August)

With the cooperation of a colleague we developed an application that manage all the activities of a GSM maintenance workshop: The IDE used was the VB.Net and we have choose ORACLE as DBSM.

July â August 2004

It was a good experience working at the CNSS (Caisse National de SÃ©curitÃ© Sociale wich can be translated in English to: National Fund of Social Security) where I was a member of its IT team for a couple of months.

ACADEMIC & WORKING BACKGROUNDS

v Network management / Data transmission (LAN-WAN): Advanced academic knowledge + Hard working experience (It was the topic of my last year project: A Java application developed under Linux aim to survey the Local Network's components using communication technologies).

v Software development / Programming (Java, C, C++, VB.Net): Academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was developed with Java under Linux Suse).

v Advanced theoretical and empirical knowledge of operation systems: process conflict, memory management, data storing, network configuration, users and groups management â¦

v Web development (php, MySQL, HTML, XML, Java script, some web administration tools such as: PhpMyAdmin): academic knowledge + personal effort: development of the AIESEC University Local Community web site for the year 2003 and of my own web site.

v System analysis and design (UML and MERISE ----- Rational Rose 2005, UMBRELLO and Power AMC 10): academic knowledge + working experience (my last year project was designed using UML on UMBRELLO: the most famous open source software running under Linux).

v DBMS (Oracle 9i, 10g under both Windows and Linux, MySQL 5 also under Windows and Linux): academic knowledge + experience working (I worked on Oracle during my first internship and on MySQL 5 in my last year project).

v Financial management: academic knowledge.

v General and analytic accounting: academic knowledge.

v Economy of companies: academic knowledge.

v Probability and Statistics: academic knowledge.

v Organization theories (very important courses about organization of the work): academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

v Human resources management: academic knowledge + associative experience at AIESEC*.

SKILLS

v Professional Skills: Leadership skills, Work in group.

v Management skills: Project management (Planning, sponsoring, preparing, presenting)

v Personal Skills & Knowledge: Open mind, easy going, ambitious and reliable. My driver licence is clean for more than five years (since Mai 2001).

ASSOCIATIVE LIFE

v Organizations: Active member at AIESEC* Co-Vice President Information System & Communication for the 2003/2OO4 mandate.

v WWW activities: Member at aiesec.net community, insatech.com, securitynets.net, linuxforum.com and very active on MiRc especially on networking, Linux and security chat rooms â¦.

INTERESTS

v Travelling: I love travelling a lot, I love discovering many other new cultures.

v Computer Sciences: Networking, IS security, Linux, all the new technologies in general.

v Sport: Tennis and swimming.

REFERENCES

Mr *********** PhD (operating system) *********

Mr *********** Network engineer at the CNI ***************

Mr *********** Network engineer at the C

For further information please do not hesitate to visit these URLs: www.aiesec.org.

Thanks a million for your time and have a good day.