ESL, Formal, General & Business Letter Writing (English language)

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Clive — Mon, 26 Mar 2007 16:24:14 GMT

Hi,

You have a lot of spelling mistakes. Do you have access to computer software that checks spelling for you automatically? That would help.

Good luck to you, I hope they accept you at Summer School.

Best wishes, Clive

This is the first letter for stating why I want to attend the Summer School :

Dear Sir/Madam

This year, in February, I successfully completed my Law studies in my country. During the past four years, I have studied different legal topics, but the most interesting area for me was the one connected with International and European Law. After I attended a European Union seminar in my country, I was even more sure that I would find myself in this field and that this is to be my future direction.

My country has status as an EEU candidate and I hope that after I aacquire the necessary knowledge and experience I will be able to help my country to implement the often difficult political and economic reforms that will bring my country closer to Europe. Based on this and at the same time having a clear European perspective, I have strong motivation to come and learn about the historical uniqueness of the European Union.

No education is comleted without experience. All of my knowledge needs practice, and coming to your school and visiting the European Union institutions will allow me to better understand its political system and get a clear picture of how it works.

I was born and live on the European continent. Even though my country is not a part of the European Union, we share the same dream about the things we care deeply about: peace, security, participatory democracy, justice and solidarity. I'm absolutely sure that, coming there, I will gain knowledge that I will be very valuable to my country.

I have the conscience of a European, with great hope for my country to one day be a part of your family.

In conclusion, I strongly hope to participate in the Summer School.

And the other letter about motivation for requesting the reduced (50%) registration fee:

Dear Sir/Madam

I live in one of the poorest countries in Europe, which for the past 16 years has been struggling its way through transition. I believe that you know the main history of my country, the crises and the recent war that we had, which produced even bigger poverty. At present, our goverment is trying to make the economy rise yet the average salary is no more than 150 euros a month.

I come from a four member family and none of us are employed. We are a traditional agricultural family where our main occupation, from which we find resources for our finances, is agriculture and agronomy. The income from this work was not enough for my education, so during my studies I also worked to pay for my education. In this area my country provides very small or no scholarship for students.

Since I graduated I still don't have a job, and now I'm in a position where I can come to Sumer School only if the fee can be reduced. With with my parents' help and my savings I can pay the rest of the expenses.

Considering the fact of my extremely strong wish to participate in your Summer School, I kindly request your help.

I'm not sure if the begining of the letter is correct It's OK.

and I also don't know how to end. Just say '

Thank you for your consideration of my application.

Yours sincerely,

signature

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Elpidija — Mon, 26 Mar 2007 14:48:05 GMT

OK. This is what I wrote for the weekend. Pleas don't mind my English mistakes because I write very bad.

This is the first letter for stating why I want to attend the Summer School :

Dear Sir/Madam

This year in February I successfully complete my Law studies in my country. During the past four years, I studied different kind of Law areas but the most interesting area for me, was the one conected with International and European Law. After I visited a seminar for European Union in my country, I was even more sure that I find myselfe in this field and that is the direction of my perfecting and future.

My country has a status of a candidate and I hope that after I aguire the necessary knoledge and experiense, I will be able to help my country to implement the often difficult political and economic reforms, that will bring my country closer yo Europe. Based on this and at the same time having a clear European perspective I have strong motivation to come and in practise to experience the historical unique of the Europen Union.

No education is comleted without a experience. All of my knoledge needs practice and coming at your school and visiting the European Union institutions, will allow me to better understand its political sistem and make a clear picture of how it works.

I'm born and live on the European continent. Even that my country is not a part of the Europen Union we share the same dream about the thing we care deeply: peace, security, participatory democracy, justice and solidarity. I'm apsolutely sure that coming there I will gain knoledge that I will be ably to valorize in my country.

I have a consciense of a European, with the biggest hope for my country for one day to be a part of your family.

Finnaly, I strongly wish to participate in the Summer School.

And the other letter about motivation for requesting the reduced (50%) registration fee:

Dear Sir/Madam

I live in one of the most porest countries in Europe, which in the past 16 years is strugguling its way through transition. I belive that you know the main history of my country, the crises and the resint war that we had, and which produced even biger poverty. In present days our goverment is trying to make the economy rise but yet the average salary is no more then 150 euros for a month.

I come out from a four memebers family and none of us is employed. We are a traditional agrocultural family where our main occupation from which we find resourses for our finances is agroculture and agronomy. The incomes only from this work were not enough for my education and durring my studies I also worked in sesions to pay for my education. In this issue my country provides very small or none scholarship for students.

After I graduated I still don't have a job and now I'm in possition where I can come only with reduced fee, because togethar with my parents help and my savings I can pay the rest of the expences.

Considering the fact tof my extremly strong wish to participate at your Summer School I kindly request for you help, which would helep me to come there.

These are my letters. They shoul be written on the aplication and I'm not sure if the begining of the letter is corect and I also don't know how to end.

Now, PLEAS corect me! I'm waiting for your sugestions and help.

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Clive — Fri, 23 Mar 2007 21:18:10 GMT

Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

We can't write the letter for you, but if you try and then post it here, we will offer you comments and advice. OK?

Best wishes, Clive

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Elpidija — Fri, 23 Mar 2007 19:25:26 GMT

Dear Clive

I need help as soon as possible. For the first time in my live I have to write motivation letter and I have no idea how. I liked very much what you wrote for Adels and that is why I'm wrriting this to you.

My motivation letter is for attending Summer School for European Union. And I also want to write motivation letter for schoolarship for the same school.

I just finish Law school and I want to go so much to this Summer School.

Pleas help me!

That's wonderful........thanks Mr Clive!!!

ADELS — Fri, 06 Oct 2006 11:23:12 GMT

this is a so good.....you are a great man..........Thank you once again.

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Clive — Thu, 05 Oct 2006 06:00:57 GMT

Hi,

Please read carefully. I've made a few changes.

Clive

Subject: Application for immigrant status. (Do you have a reference number?)

Dear Sir/Madam,

With this letter I would like to request special consideration due to the unusual situation I have. My application for immigrant status was recently approved << I thought it was not approved ? You need to state the problem clearly by the Home Office under(************). All of my scores in the *** test met the required standard, except that my reading score was very slightly below, by a mere 0.5. I need to start my new life in the UK and support my self financially without any need to public funds. I will be thankful if you can give this letter your favorable consideration.

I have studied English over many years. I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English. Please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, my university first year preparatory program, my British Council confirmation letter of English courses and my immigrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and able to meet all the requirements of (********). I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly in English in my professional environment as a diagnostic radiographer. If I had not been ill on the day of the exam, I could definitely have achieved the lost 0.5 point in the reading element.

My new life in England is just about to begin. I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. Please allow me to start my new life. I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment will improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK. I want to practice my profession legally, to be able to finance myself and to prepare for my post-graduate degree in (********) next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a (********) in any way. I have already been awarded membership of the Society of (**********) in the UK. Employers are convinced of my professional abilities but they are waiting for the (***) registration. I enjoy spending time with English people and I am eager to be one of the best (*******) in the country. The last thing I want to do as an immigrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds due to unemployment. I want to be a productive member of the country's work force.

Thank you for taking the time to review my letter and application. Please give me this opportunity. Your consideration and assistance will be very much appreciated. I look forward to your positive response. If you have further questions, please feel free to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

BORMINTAL

Re: Many thanks Clive, here is the modified one!

ADELS — Thu, 05 Oct 2006 00:25:08 GMT

Dear Mr Clive

Many thanks for your help, here is a new form, please help me checking if there are mistakes, and please give your advice. I don't know what title I can write?

And once again thanks dear Clive for your kind gesture.

Dear Sir/Madam

All of my scores met the required standard, except that my reading score was very slightly below, by 0.5. With this letter I would like to request special consideration due to the unusual situation I have. My recent application for migrant status was recently approved by the Home Office under(************). I need to start my new life in the UK and support my self financially without any need to public funds. I will be thankful if you can give this letter your favorable consideration.

I have studied English over many years. I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English; please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, my university first year preparatory program, my British Council confirmation letter of English courses and my migrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and able to meet all the requirements of (********). I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly in English in my professional environment as a *******. If I had not been ill on the day of the exam, I could definitely have achieved the lost 0.5 point in the reading element.

My new life in England has just begun. I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. Please allow me to start my new life, I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment will improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK. I want to practice my profession legally, to be able to finance myself and to prepare for my post-graduate degree in (********) next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a (********) in any way. I have already been awarded membership of the Society of (**********) in the UK, employers are convinced in my professional abilities but they are waiting for the (***) registration. I enjoy spending time with English people and I am eager to be one of the best (*******) in the country. The last thing I want to do as an immigrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds due to unemployment. I want to be a productive member of the country's work force.

Yours sincerely

BORMINTAL

Re: Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Clive — Tue, 03 Oct 2006 00:58:16 GMT

Hi ADELS,

Welcome to the Forum.

I've done my best.

I wish you good luck with this.

Clive

Dear Sir/Madam:

I suggest that you add a first paragraph to sumarize the situation. eg

My recent application for UK permanent residency was recently rejected because of my IELTS scores. All of my scores met the required standard, except that my reading score was very slightly below, by 0.5. With this letter I would like to request special consideration that will permit me to remain in the UK as a permanent resident. Please allow me to start my new life. I will be able to support myself financially without any need for public funds

I have studied English over many years. I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English; please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, my university first year preparatory program, my British Council confirmation letter of English courses and my migrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and able to meet all the requirements of registration. I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly in English in my professional environment as a ********. If I had not been ill on the day of the exam, I could definitely have achieved the lost 0.5 point in the reading element. (any chance of getting a note from your doctor about the illness?)

My new life in England has just begun. I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. <<<< nice words I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment will improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK. I want to practice my profession legally ,to be able to finance myself and to prepare for my post-graduate degree in ************ next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a *************** in any way. I have already been awarded membership of the Society of ********** in the UK. <<< If you have a good profession and some success already , perhaps you should mention this at the beginning of the letter? I enjoy spending time with English people and I am eager to make the UK my home. The last thing I want to do as an immigrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds. I want to be a productive member of the country's work force.

Yours sincerely,

Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

ADELS — Mon, 02 Oct 2006 17:26:50 GMT

Need help in writing an official letter, please somebody go over it and tell me if it is okey.!

Dear Sir/Madam:

With this letter I would like to express the need for special consideration of my IELTS scores. I have got 6 in the reading element, which has limited me from reaching the required overall score.

Having fulfilled the required criterions for *********Programme by the UK Home Office; which means permanent residency in the UK, I need to start my new life, and support my self financially without any need for public funds, therefore I would be thankful if you can give my issue your most favorable consideration regarding to my score in the reading part.

I studied English over many years, I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English; please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, the university first year preparatory program, the British Council confirmation letter of English courses and the migrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and prepared to meet all requirements of the registration, I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly using English language in my professional environment as a ********, and if I werenât ill at the exam day I could definitely achieve the lost 0.5 point in the reading element.

My new life in England has just begun, I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment would improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK, I want to practice my profession legally to be able to finance my self and prepare for my post graduate degree in ************next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a ***************in any way. I have been awarded membership of the Society of ********** in the UK, I enjoy spending time with English people and I am willing and able to make the UK my main home. The last thing I want to do as a migrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds due to unemployment; because of the 0.5 point in reading, I want to be productive and implant my self in the country work force.

Thank you for taking the time to review my letter and application. Please give me this opportunity to be acceptable with this score. Your consideration and assistance will be very much appreciated. I look forward to your positive response. If you have further questions, please feel free to contact me.

Yours faithfully

Bormington