Re: Could anybody check my letter?

Feebs11 — Thu, 30 Nov 2006 22:08:55 GMT

Anonymous wrote:
Hello!

Could you please check this letter I've written from the point of grammar and style? I want to apply for a scholarship and to do so I need to find a cultural organization abroad which will be ready to admit me to work with them for several months and develop a project together.

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Anna J. and I am writing to express my interest in a scholarship programme sponsored by the Polish Ministry of Culture along with the government of your country. The scholarship would include my several-month-long stay within your organization, during which a collaborative project should be developed. Please read the description of my project proposal attached.

I am a marketing specialist working in Marketing Department at the National Museum in Gdansk, Poland. During my three years' work here I gained valuable experience in field of promotion and marketing. My responsibilities include: media and marketing planning, messaging, fundraising, developing co-operation with sponsors, organising promotional campaigns for Museum exhibitions, programs and events, working in collaboration with computer graphics to oversight of marketing materials and design process, conducting research related to better understanding the national and local markets etc.

The project I would like to develop with your museum will focus on an exchange of experiences regarding such issues like: communication, new forms of publicity, strategies that maximize audience growth and, finally, the role marketing plays in modern cultural institutions. In general, the project will include development of a communication plan and organization of a conference with participation of representatives of media, sponsors and local authorities as well as cultural activists.

If you feel that your organization would benefit from such a form of international co-operation and could accept me as a part of your team for several months in order to execute the project mentioned above, please contact me as soon as possible. Thank you for considering my request.

Yours faithfully,

Anna J.

Minor changes to improve grammer - otherwise, well expressed and to the point.

Could anybody check my letter?

Anonymous — Tue, 28 Nov 2006 13:52:20 GMT

Hello!

Could you please check this letter I've written from the point of grammar and style? I want to apply for a scholarship and to do so I need to find a cultural organization abroad which will be ready to admit me to work with them for several months and develop a project together.

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Anna J. and I am writing to express my interest in a scholarship programme sponsored by Polish Ministry of Culture along with the government of your country. The scholarship would include my several-month-long stay within your organization, during which a collaborative project should be developed. Please, read the description of my project proposal attached.

I am a marketing specialist working in Marketing Department at the National Museum in Gdansk, Poland. During three years of my work here I gained valuable experience in field of promotion and marketing. My responsibilities include: media and marketing planning, messaging, fundraising, developing co-operation with sponsors, organising promotional campaigns for Museum exhibitions, programs and events, working in collaboration with computer graphics to oversight of marketing materials and design process, conducting research related to better understanding the national and local markets etc.

The project I would like to develop with your museum, will focus on exchange of experiences regarding such issues like: communication, new forms of publicity, strategies that maximize audience growth and finally, the role marketing plays in nowadays cultural institution. In general, the project will include development of a communication plan and organization of a conference with participation of representatives of media, sponsors and local authorities as well as cultural activists.

If you feel that your organization would benefit from such a form of international co-operation and accept me as a part of your team for several months in order to execute a project mentioned above, please contact me as soon as possible. Thank you for considering my request.

Yours faithfully,

Anna J.

ESL, Formal, General & Business Letter Writing (English language)

Re: Could anybody check my letter?

Could anybody check my letter?