Re: Can You check my English letter ?

Feebs11 — Sun, 30 Sep 2007 00:17:22 GMT

Anonymous wrote:

Hi Stephanie!

I haven't heard from you for ages! Nevermind,[Never mind >> two words] let's talk about Marcin, then.
I can tell you a lot about him as I've know him since we were both 10. I met him quite by chance and that's how we became best friends.

As I said before,[Where?] he's 16. Music is the thing he likes most. He started playing the guitar and the piano when he was 11. He loves music.[Repetition - avoid]
Marcin is incredibly extrovert, with a sense of humour and extremely hard-working because of everyday's music lessons and, of course, High School. Friday is the only day he can meet anyone just for fun.

His family is really big. It contains him, 3 brothers, 1 sister and parents.[Usually you would start with the parents: His family consists of his parents, 3 borthers and a sister] Each of them is much older than he is.

What more can I say about him... He likes watching Top Gear, football matches and loves eating. Is there any negative thing I can say about him ? Maybe the fact he's morbidly pedantic. Everything has to have its own place, especially in his, let's say, "music case". He doesn't even want to think about any disorder in there. But I'm not sure whether it's disadvantage of him or not...

I'm sure you will like Marcin very much. Let me know whether you find him jazzy or not.

See you in future,
Krzysiek.

Can You check my English letter ?

Anonymous — Sat, 29 Sep 2007 14:49:52 GMT

Hi everyone.

My name's Chris, Im 16 yo guy from Poland, learning in the High School in Wroclaw.
My English teacher wanted us to write an e-mail to a girl who wanted to know something about a friend who is expected to come to her house in England for a holiday time.
Have to have it written corretly so I ask you to check whether there are any mistakes cause my English is still very poor (you can tell me whether I made any mistakes in what I've written above )

I completely don't know where to place commas in English as I've never been told how to use them - so help me with placing them in this letter - I will be grateful.

That the email.

Hi Stephanie!

I haven't heard from you for ages! Nevermind, let's talk about Marcin, then.
I can tell you a lot about him as I've know him since we were both 10. I met him quite by chance and that's how we became best friends.

As I said before, he's 16. Music is the thing he likes most. He started playing the guitar and the piano when he was 11. He loves music.
Marcin is incredibly extrovert, with a sense of humour and extremely hard-working because of everyday's music lessons and, of course, High School. Friday is the only day he can meet anyone just for fun.

His family is really big. It contains him, 3 brothers, 1 sister and parents. Each of them is much older than he is.

What can I say more about him... He likes watching Top Gear, football matches and loves eating. Is there any negative thing I can say about him ? Maybe the fact he's morbidly pedantic. Everything has to have its own place, especially in his, let's say, "music case". He doesn't even want to think about any disorder in there. But I'm not sure whether it's disadvantage of him or not...

I'm sure you will like Marcin very much. Let me know whether you find him jazzy or not.

See you in future,
Krzysiek.

Thanks in advance guys
Greets,
Krzysiek.

ESL, Formal, General & Business Letter Writing (English language)

Re: Can You check my English letter ?

Can You check my English letter ?