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Re: CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!

Anonymous — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 16:18:50 GMT

Please check my motivation letter,it`s urgent.Thanks in advance.

Re: CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!!!!

Anonymous — Sat, 09 Feb 2008 12:10:04 GMT

Dear Sir or Madam,/please check my motivation letter, it`s urgent. I will be very grateful if you help me.Thanks in advance.

My name is Simeon Kostov, presently a student in my final year at high school. I am born and raised in Bulgaria ,in a family in which the most priced values are tolerance and cultural understanding .I have always wanted to get international communication experience and to get know different countries with their unique traditions ,culture ,customs and historical heritage. I am quite sure that becoming acquainted with another culture and living in a different social environment would broadened my mind and would made me much more independent and capable to face and deal with various issues and challenges .Getting sufficient knowledge is my primary goal and I believe that the best way to achieve it is studying abroad.

In 2007 Bulgaria became a member of the European Union which gave an opportunity to many talented and ambitious young people to travel and to look for better educational possibilities .I am one of these ambitious youngsters and i am very enthusiastic about the opportunity to apply for the international study program that you offer and to have chance to go abroad to study and work.

Personally I define myself as dynamic ,adaptable ,conscious and confident person .I am serious goal-oriented individual ,highly motivated to face various challenges .I think that a person should always be ready and well prepared to face and deal with the challenges of the dynamic world in which we live in,that is why I am truly convinced that studying abroad will provide me the invaluable experience and opportunity to develop my communication skills to a high level .Residing in a different social ,cultural , linguistic and bureaucrat environment would enhanced my abilities to solve different and sometimes unexpected problems and would made me a self-sufficient person .Being an independent ,conscious and responsible person I am sure that I will manage to adapt to a life in a foreign country. My independence and full responsibility for myself have driven me to a higher level of maturity than many of my peers, a quality that differentiates me from many other applicants. Studying and communicating with people from various social and cultural backgrounds ,according to me are amazing and exciting opportunities .I believe that the communication with other people is not difficult to me, because I am very open, urging for knowledge and sociable person.

My desire to study in an international environment is one of the main reasons for my choice to study abroad .The other significant reason for my choice is the quality of the education provided by the European universities. No matter in which specific field you would like to realize yourself after graduating you would have significant advantage if you have graduated in some of the prestigious European universities.

I am convinced that attending to one of the universities in Denmark will give me great opportunities in the future to become a professional in the field I would like to build up a career.

Every youngster`s task is to choose the opportunities from all possibilities and according to these,to create a vision of their future. My vision for the future is related to my ambition for getting qualitative knowledge and becoming a professional and I am highly resolute to achieve my goal.

When you decide to study abroad you need to make yourself acquainted with the country in which you are going to live in. That is why I made some researches for my own concerning all educational possibilities in Denmark. Quite honestly I was astounded when I discovered the various qualitative features of the Danish educational system. I also was impressed by the attractive business climate with high standards in education and research in an international perspective. I connected with some Bulgarian students studying in Denmark and they gave me detailed information about the advantages and disadvantages in the educational system in Denmark. They also shared with me some of their experiences concerning their adaptation to the Danish society .I think that the features of the Danish educational system such as active study environments ,the interdisciplinary studies and the project-based activities ,which unfortunately are not features of the Bulgarian educational system, will contribute for providing me of qualitative knowledge and competitive abilities for facing the challenges of an international career .The Danish educational system prepares you for the real world and helps you to develop your skills that can be used for your professional career. According to me this is very important because a person after his graduation should be very well prepared to deal with the various issues concerning his occupation. Unfortunately the Bulgarian educational system does not provide such an effective and modern way of teaching as the Danish does that is why after many researches I made my crucial choice to study in Denmark where the provocative way of thinking is encouraged and the modern teaching methods take place.

I have got a clear vision for my future studies. I would like to gain a solid knowledge of cross-cultural and intercultural issues and strategies. I desire to work in the field of international management of multinational companies. Working around capital markets is the career I want. I believe that studying in Denmark will enable me to develop the right professional qualities and to get the most appropriate knowledge needed for becoming a professional, successful and prosperous person.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my application. I hope that you will be persuaded of my potential to perform well on this English-language study programme. I can be available for interview at any time and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,Simeon Kostov

Re: CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!!!!

Grammar Geek — Thu, 20 Dec 2007 18:40:24 GMT

MargoPyu - Make sure you click on "reply" and not "report" for futute posts. This came to the moderators' area, but I put it back.

Re: CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!!!!

MargoPyu — Thu, 20 Dec 2007 09:27:12 GMT

Hi Feebs 11!
Thank you SO much for help! Thank you!

What do you mean by "Sociality"? Sorry..it's Sociology.

Faculty "Technology, Organisation and Learning".
"This programme combines informatics, sociology and pedagogics in order to build an interdisciplinary basis for understanding and addressing organisational change. You will be introduced to the three disciplines mentioned above and gain insight into using them within different perspectives on organisational change. This programme emphasizes how technical, social, and individual processes of change interact and influence each other."

Were these to do with Mathematics? Yes.. and with Informatics also.,...

RE: Can YOU check my motivation letter for university..

MargoPyu — Thu, 20 Dec 2007 09:25:25 GMT

Re: CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!!!!

Feebs11 — Thu, 20 Dec 2007 00:40:57 GMT

MargoPyu wrote:
Hello
I am new here, this is my first time to come here. I am not a native speaker english, I hope someone can give me some advices, cause the letter I wrote looks very stranger. . Thank you SO much
Statement of purpose

In 2006, I graduated from the Voronezh State Pedagogical University ~~for the Mathematics - Informatics faculty. I have~~ with a diploma of Teacher of Mathematics and Informatics.I ~~always wanted~~ would like to continue ~~my life~~ working with ~~the~~ computers because ~~I think thatâs my possibility to make very much in the future and make a successful career.~~ I find this area very interesting and exciting. ~~because It is the area where people can directly interact with a computer to meet their needs.~~ Since computers have become a part of human life and since there is no effective interaction as of now, I want to be involved in their development. I believe that currently my knowledge of the computing world and the technology as a whole is still very limited.

I feel technology is the way of the future. Technology can help ~~the~~ under-developed countries to become developed. Technology is the aid that will help countries move into the next century where all our problems will be but a distant memory.

~~But I always was interested with Organisation also~~.I am also interested in organisational theory. ~~We didnât study this subject in~~ ~~Voronezh State Pedagogical University~~. This course being offered by the University of Oslo, Technology, Organisation and Learning, is ~~new for me and~~ really interesting to me because it consists of all of subjects in which I interested and that I like! ~~I am really glad that the University of Oslo has faculty where you can learn so important for me subjects together.~~

I also want to study abroad because later I will have better possibilities to find work in other European Union countries and acquire/obtain much experience. The studying will not be hard ~~thing~~ for me, because all the subjects are interesting and Iâve always wanted to know ~~how to do something~~ more than I do now. The most important thing is that I love working with computers and I want to make my career ~~and do very much in Computer range~~.in the computer field.

From any experience abroad I am expecting a challenge in professional and personal domains and I hope to improve my in-depth knowledge, my language ability and other crucial qualifications at a distinguished university in the culturally and historically very interesting capital city of .... Getting a new perspective on my life from a foreign ~~European~~ country is one of my major intents. In my ~~real~~ life I love to communicate with people and to make new friends, so living in a new place will not be difficult for me. I am highly interested in going abroad to enrich my knowledge and also to share with others my culture and my language.

I would finally like to add ~~some activities which have developed in me a permanent taste of competitiveness and also emphasized my organization skills~~. that I have been working in children's camps as an organizer for five years. I also participate in a group for dances. At the university and in my high school years I was the organizer of conferences, concerts, meetings, etc.. and I took also part in a project in the field of Mathematics, Informatics and Sociality.

I believe that to study abroad can change my life and can help me to make successful future because I will learn many new things ~~which I havenât learned before~~.

Yours sincerely,

What do you mean by "Sociality"?

You should say what the conferences and meetings that you organized were about. Were these to do with Mathematics?

CAn YOU check my motivation letter for Univesity!!!!!

MargoPyu — Tue, 18 Dec 2007 23:14:16 GMT

Hello

I am new here, this is my first time to come here. I am not a native speaker english, I hope someone can give me some advices, cause the letter I wrote looks very stranger. . Thank you SO much

Statement of purpose

In 2006, I graduated from the Voronezh State Pedagogical University for the Mathematics - Informatics faculty. I have a diploma of Teacher of Mathematics and Informatics.

I always wanted to continue my life working with the computers because I think thatâs my possibility to make very much in the future and make a successful career. I find this area very interesting and exciting because this is the area where people can directly interact with a computer to meet their needs. Since computers have become a part of human life and as there is no effective interaction as of now.

I feel technology is the way of the future. Technology can help the under-developed to become developed. Technology is the aid that will help countries move into the next century where all our problems will be but a distant memory. I believe that currently my knowledge of the computing world and the technology as a whole is still very limited.

But I always was interested with Organisation also. We didnât have this subject in my faculty. This faculty Technology, Organisation and Learning is new for me and really interesting because it consist all of subjects which I interested and like! I really glad that University of Oslo has faculty where you can learn so important for me subjects together.

I want to study abroad because later I will have better possibilities to get work on other Europe Union countries and get much experience. The studying will not be hard thing for me, because all subjects are interesting and Iâve always wanted to know how to do something more than I do now. The most important thing is that I love working with computers and I want to make great career and do very much in Computer range.

From an experience abroad I am expecting a challenge in professional and personal domains and I hope to improve my in-depth knowledge, my language ability and other crucial qualifications at a distinguished university in the culturally and historically very interesting capital city of .... Getting a new perspective on my life from a foreign European country is one of my major intents. In my real life I love communicate and make new friends, so living in a new place will not be hard thing for me. I am highly interested in going abroad to enrich my knowledge and also to share wit other my culture and my language.

I would finally like to add some activities which have developed in me a permanent taste of competitiveness and also emphasized my organization skills. I have been working in children camps as an organizer for 5 years. Also I participated in a group for dances. At the university and in my high school years I was organizer of conferences, concerts, meeting, etc.. and I took also part in a project in the field of Mathematics, Informatics and Sociality.

I think Graduating abroad can change my life and can help me to make successful future because I will learn much things which I havenât learned before.

Sincerely,