Re: Please correct my short letter

Feebs11 — Tue, 08 Apr 2008 21:04:01 GMT

Anonymous

could please correct this letter or draft in better way pls

Date: 07^th April, 2008
Ref : KCW/101/2008 Al Salem Establishment Safat, 32035. Shuwaikh.
Attention: Mr. Mohammad Amin, Human Resources Manager
Dear Mr. Amin,
SUPPLY OF MANPOWER: REVISED RATES
Further to your letter dated 23^rd March 2008, we would like to bring to your notice that the rates quoted for the supply of Engineering candidates are very low in relation to other companies' quoted fees. Therefore could you please send us revised increased rates for the Engineer category in order that we may supply suitable candidates on time.
Yours sincerely,

Hussain Yatim
Deputy General Manager

This seems odd. Who is charging whom? If you are supplying candidates for jobs, then it is for you to set the charges. If the person to whom you are writing is supplying candidates, then the letter does not make sense.

Please correct my short letter

Anonymous — Tue, 08 Apr 2008 06:31:29 GMT

could please correct this letter or draft in better way pls

Date: 07^th April, 2008 Ref : KCW/101/2008 Al Salem EstablishmentSafat, 32035. Shuwaikh. Attention : Mr. Mohammad Amin Human Resources Manager Dear Mr. Amin SUPPLY OF MANPOWER PERSONNELâS REVISED RATES Further to your letter dated 23^rd March 2008, we would like to bring your notice that the Rates quoted for supply of candidates for Engineer category are very low while we do the survey in the market. Therefore could you please send us the revised increased rates for the Engineer category in order supply personnelâs on time. Yours sincerely, Hussain YatimDeputy General Manager

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Re: Please correct my short letter

Please correct my short letter