http://www.englishforums.com/English/FormalGeneralBusinessLetterWriting-EnglishLanguage/Forum5.htmFormal Letter writing questions, how to write a cover letter, general, business, official, reference, character, leave, sponsorship, invitation, CV, writing to an English company, Learn how to start and end a letter in the English language.enCSMOD (Build: 3260.39585)http://www.englishforums.com/English/IeltsCheckComplainLetter/gvvbx/post.htm#521965Mon, 02 Jun 2008 08:15:41 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:521965Mister Micawber0http://www.englishforums.com/English/IeltsCheckComplainLetter/gvvbx/post.htm#521965http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-521965.xml.<br /><strong><em>I have stricken out inappropriate portions and underlined some problem areas:<br /></em></strong><br /><p><span>Dear Sport Club Manager:</span></p> <p><span>I am writing this letter to <span style="text-decoration:underline;">have an enquiries</span> <span style="text-decoration:underline;">regards with</span> sport club membership. <strike>First of all I would like to introduce my self.</strike> I am a <strike>college</strike> student <span style="text-decoration:underline;">of</span> Sydney University. <strike>In addition,</strike> I <span style="text-decoration:underline;">got</span> a reference from <span style="text-decoration:underline;">my</span> classmate<strike> in the university</strike> <span style="text-decoration:underline;">that</span> your sport club has many facilities and kinds of <span style="text-decoration:underline;">sport equipments</span>. Last week, when I <span style="text-decoration:underline;">surveyed</span> your <strike>sport club place</strike> <span style="text-decoration:underline;">facilities. My</span> first impression was very good <span style="text-decoration:underline;">and feel convenience</span>. <strike>There are three reasons. First, sport club location is strategic, close to the city and campus. I do not have any difficulties to go there. Second, your sport club has many kinds of sport equipment and facilities such as treadmill and a large swimming pool. Furthermore, you keep toilet and swimming pool to be always clean and sterile.Third, you have fitness tutors who are very helpful and friendly to help all the member.</strike></span></p> <p><span>I have some enquiries<strike>&nbsp; <span style="text-decoration:underline;">as the</span> following</strike> <strike>bellows</strike> :</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>How much <span style="text-decoration:underline;">does</span> the registration <span style="text-decoration:underline;">of</span> membership fee ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>How much <span style="text-decoration:underline;">does</span> the monthly membership fee ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>What are the required <span style="text-decoration:underline;">document</span> for membership registration ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>What are the sport packages that you have ?</span></p> <p><span><strike>I am waiting your reply.&nbsp; I am expecting you will give me the complete information.&nbsp;</strike> </span></p> <p><span>I really appreciate <strike>for </strike>your assistance. </span></p> <p><span>Regards,</span></p><div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/IeltsCheckComplainLetter/gvbpm/post.htmSat, 31 May 2008 16:11:55 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:521334smartguys1http://www.englishforums.com/English/IeltsCheckComplainLetter/gvbpm/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-521334.xmlHi,</p><p>could u help me please to check my english grammar ?&nbsp;</p><p>I have one complain letter for IELTS test.</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>I really appreciated for your help&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>Regards,</p><p>SG&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p><span>Dear Sport Club Manager:</span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>I am writing this letter to have an enquiries regards with sport club membership. First of all I would like to introduce my self. I am a college student of Sydney University. In addition, I got a reference from my classmate in the university that your sport club has many facilities and kinds of sport equipments. Last week, when I surveyed your sport club place facilities. My first impression was very good and feel convenience. There are three reasons. First, sport club location is strategic, close to the city and campus. I do not have any difficulties to go there. Second, your sport club has many kinds of sport equipment and facilities such as treadmill and a large swimming pool. Furthermore, you keep toilet and swimming pool to be always clean and sterile.Third, you have fitness tutors who are very helpful and friendly to help all the member.</span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>I have some enquiries&nbsp; as the following bellows :</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>How much does the registration of membership fee ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>How much does the monthly membership fee ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>What are the required document for membership registration ?</span></p> <p><span>·<span></span><span>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span></span><span>What are the sport packages that you have ?</span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>I am waiting your reply.&nbsp; I am expecting you will give me the complete information.&nbsp; </span></p> <p><span>I really appreciate for your assistance. </span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>Regards,</span></p> <p><span>&nbsp;</span></p> <p><span>***</span></p> <p>&nbsp;<div style="clear:both;"></div>