http://www.englishforums.com/English/FormalGeneralBusinessLetter-Writing/Forum5.htmFormal letter-writing questions, how to write a cover letter, general, business, official, reference, character, leave, sponsorship, or invitation letter, CVs, writing to an English company, Learn how to start and end a letter.enXMOD (Build: 3607.32596)http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#303272Thu, 23 Apr 2009 01:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:303272Tantan0http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#303272http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-303272.xmlDear Sir, Madam, I am planning to apply for Master's Program in Canada. I already have made my "Statement of Interest" and I would like to have some feedbacks on this document. If it is possible for you to do it, please let me know that I can post it on this Forum. Many thanks in advance, Tantan.http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57086Sat, 23 May 2009 01:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:57086anon11http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57086http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-57086.xmlhunnybunny, You are most welcome. Sorry we couldn't arrive a satisfactory solution for you. But this back and forth isn't doing it. So I hope with the comments that I have given, you are better prepared to move forward using alternate resources. MountainHikerhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57083Thu, 23 Apr 2009 01:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:57083hunny*bunny*2http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57083http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-57083.xmlThank you for your help so far! greets hunnybunnyhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57046Sat, 23 May 2009 01:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:57046anon13http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57046http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-57046.xmlHi Bunny, Unfortunately, I can't keep providing ongoing advice on this same topic. I have given you plenty of advice that you should be able to craft a well written letter. I need to help other people as well, and each iteration consumes a lot of time and effort. If this letter is very important to you, I suggest you hire professional assistance. You might wish to investigate Welford Writes . I have never used his service, but he has helped in this forum. He gave excellent forum assistance. If I can give one last comment: Focus on what you have learned or gained. The reader doesn't care about how many organizations etc. What the reader is most interested in is how have your experiences helped shape you into who you are. And how...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57041Mon, 23 Feb 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:57041hunny*bunny*4http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#57041http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-57041.xmlHi there... I am not quiet sure about the new outline you suggested...but I tried my best. Now I have two different drafts...in my opinion the second is better...what do you say? I am really always surprised because of my capitalisation....it's that we have this in German and I'm used to it..I know it's no excuse. Hope you have the time and patience to look at it again. greets hunnybunny ----------------------------------------------------------------- Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the Master’s Degree in Science programme in International Management. My aim is to work in an international field of work related to marketing and consulting. Therefore I want to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge in...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#56807Mon, 23 Mar 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56807anon15http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#56807http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56807.xmlDear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the Master’s Degree in Science programme in International Management. My aim is to work in an international field of work related to marketing and consulting. Therefore I want to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge in management and analytical skills to evaluate business in an international context. Currently I am studying Economics at the xxx University in xxx, Germany. I will [] graduate in April 2005 with a Bachelor of Economics (honors) degree. Although I want to focus on the marketing and consulting fields later, I want to gain necessary knowledge in all major fields of business. Already in my school times I enjoyed management tasks, for example I was involved in the...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#56729Thu, 23 Apr 2009 01:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56729hunny*bunny*6http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/2/lvqh/Post.htm#56729http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56729.xmlHi MountainHiker, it's me again. I took some time to review and rewrite my letter. Well, then I had some problems with the server, don't know if it was error from my server or if the homepage had problems, but I couldn't post anything....well, but now it's ok again. I hope the letter is far better now. Please have a look at it. Thanking you! -------------------------- Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the Master’s Degree in Science programme in International Management. My aim is to work in an international field of work related to marketing and consulting. Therefore I want to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge in management and analytical skills to evaluate business in an international context. ...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56081Mon, 23 Feb 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56081anon17http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56081http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56081.xmlbunny, The challenge is that you have hidden in the middle of one paragraph your major career objective. You've got to make this stuff very clear. Tell the reader early in your letter how you have prepared yourself for your career choice and then follow up with some concrete examples. The information required in your essay is, for the most part, already present. It just needs to be better organized. I still don't see a lot of passion, but maybe it just isn't there. So at least organize your so that the reader is able to see that you have a game plan and you are executing your game plan. For example, I graduated as a mechanical engineer. In point or short form (as a crude example)... I like science. I have always...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56068Fri, 23 Jan 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56068hunny*bunny*8http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56068http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56068.xmlHello... I see that I have to reorganise my letter...well, I think I will rewrite it and say exactly what I mean and what I want. Regarding your outline...I thought I structured it exactly in this way??##! Well, but if it's not clear to a third person I do it more clearly and also let the text have more flow need some time for that thanxxx a lothttp://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56042Fri, 23 Jan 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56042anon19http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56042http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56042.xmlBunny, I have gone through your essay and made some comments. It looks scattered to me. Not well thought out. I have also started a second iteration. You need to decide which one you want to work with and make the essay flow smoother. You are about to graduate from university in a business program. You should have strong writing and organization skills. I think you need to spend a few days thinking about and reviewing your work. Good luck. MountainHiker Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the in International Management . Currently I am studying Economics at the xxx University in xxx, Germany. I will graduate in April 2005 with a Bachelor of Economic Science (honors) degree. My aim is to work in an...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56017Mon, 23 Feb 2009 02:29:21 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:56017hunny*bunny*10http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#56017http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-56017.xmlhello again, I changed the letter and also tried to be more direct and express my passion. After reading it I think it's still not what you are looking for, but some parts of my letter are really good I think. Waiting for your comments and always ready to improve more. thanxxx ----------------------------------------------------------------- Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the MSc in International Management at xxx University. Currently I am studying Economics at the xxx University in xxx, Germany. I will graduate in April 2005 with a Bachelor of Economic Science (honors) degree. My aim is to work in an international field of work related to marketing and consulting. My main subjects are marketing,...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55890Mon, 23 Feb 2009 02:29:22 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:55890anon111http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55890http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-55890.xmlDear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the MSc International Management at xxx University. Currently I am studying Economics at the xxx University in xxx, Germany. I will graduate in April 2005 with a Bachelor of Economics (Honors-check spelling) degree. The remainder of the paragraph needs work. I wanted to work in an international field of work related to marketing and consulting. My main subjects are Marketing, Microeconomic Theory, Business Civil Law and Theory of National and International Taxation and finance. Although I want to focus on the Marketing and Consulting field later, I want to gain enough knowledge in all major fields of Business. Thats why I choosed a broad range of subjects. To gain more practical...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55828Thu, 23 Apr 2009 01:29:22 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:55828hunny*bunny*12http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55828http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-55828.xmlDear MountainHiker, I have prepared a Motivation letter, which is (I think) too long. But actually, I left out a lot of things I also wanted to mention. For example, my voluntry works in parishes and in a refugee camp, which I haven't mentioned or my plans about taking the GRE Exam. What is your opinion? Shall I write a longer letter and can I somehow reduce the length of the letter without leaving out information. I hope you will look over my letter and give some comments. Thanking you. cheers --------------------------------------- Here goes the letter: Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Nicole Xxxx and I am writing to apply for the MSc International Management course at xxx University. Currently I am studying...http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55498Mon, 23 Mar 2009 02:29:22 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:55498hunny*bunny*13http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55498http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-55498.xmlHello MountainHiker, thank you very much for your quick response. I already, went trough the letters of Nadine and Soufiane and some others. I think your advice and comments were really helpful to them. So that's why I also requested your help. Anyway I will prepare my letter carefully and post it then on the forum. I would really appreciate your support. Thanking you in advance! cheers hunnybunnyhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55483Mon, 23 Feb 2009 02:29:22 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:55483anon114http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htm#55483http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-55483.xmlHi, You can just post your letter here. Please have a look for Nadine's and Soufiane's motivation letters. This seems to be a popular topic. We are not proofreaders, and only give general comments. You should look around the site as you will others at various stages of their motivation letter. And please Post:46521 . You must also be prepared to accept blunt criticisms and to work hard at your letter. I assume that you have thought deeply about your future and why you want to pursue your studies. Thus, you letter should reflect that. MountainHikerhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htmSat, 23 May 2009 01:29:22 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:55478hunny*bunny*15http://www.englishforums.com/English/MotivationLetterUniversities/lvqh/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments5-55478.xmlHi! I am about to prepare my applications for some Universities in the UK. Then I just found this website and registered here. I need help for writing my motivation letter. I asked myself, if I just could post my prepared letter on this forum and you can give some comments about it. Or do I need to be a member? Or do I have to pay for help? I hope you will reply soon. cheers