ESL, Formal, General & Business Letter Writing (English language)

Re: We've done it! :)

Anonymous — Wed, 23 Jan 2008 02:20:14 GMT

Hi Siberian girl ,
I desperately need letter of motivation for my higher studies.I am looking for example letters. Can you share your letter of motivstion .
Thanks
murthy0425@yahoo.com

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

Anonymous — Thu, 25 Jan 2007 10:34:48 GMT

Hi,

We don't send out personal replies by email and we don't provide letters for people. If you want us to help you will have to post your own letter here for advice.

Hi there,

I have been working out my head to come out with a letter of motivation to apply for admission into a foriegn university,am a holder of a BA in Geography and wish to further my education ,so one of my requirements include a letter of motivation,so i will be very happy if u can help me write one.I wish to go register in the Faculty of education and i need a motivation letter,i will be very happy if u can reply me through my e mail address Thanks for ur piece was very nice.

Bye and waiting

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

Anonymous — Sun, 01 Oct 2006 18:16:19 GMT

Annon..will u correct my motivational letter too? please! If u concess to it..where should i post it???? I can't show the letter to my friends out here for correction because i don't feel comfortable owing to my not so good english.

Help me!

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

Anonymous — Fri, 31 Mar 2006 11:50:59 GMT

it was a great help thank you

For valuable sugestion

Anonymous — Mon, 06 Feb 2006 04:40:50 GMT

Dear sir/Madam

I m sending my motivation letter for valuable suggestion. MOTIVATION AND FUTURE PLANS ( INCLUDING FUTURE EMPLOYMENT) for the subject of development evaluation and management masters degree course:

Office of District Development Committee (DDC), Jhapa is a leading organization in order to formulate, implement and evaluation management it's own local resource-based program and the central government program for the district development effectively. This office is located in every district head quarter of the country comprising six section presented in the organizational chart attached herewith among which Agriculture, Forestry Environment & Industry section or Natural Resource Management section being the one newly established. This section delivers the technical service like participatory planning, it's implementation and evaluation management of the above sector programmes and project of the district. Besides these, the section formulate short and long term policies, management strategy and public awareness programmes so that people under programmes affected area are motivated to feel that the projects are for themselves welfare.

Nepal is the landlocked, one of the agro-based economy country in the world where more than 80% people in this impoverished nation earn their living from agriculture. Inspite of the concentration of huge work force in agriculture, the productivity is extremely low in the country. Statistics reveal that more than 40% of the population below the poverty line, unable to meet their basic requirements. With rapid growing population, the problem is going to be worse in the days to come. Although It's not so lack the potential. Has a sufficient natural resources and diverse of favorable agro-climates. It has not been much able to exploit the opportunities due to lack of money and skilled manpower in proper planning & evaluation management sector. As a result most of farmers are bound to labour very hard for a little product.

However, many 5years plans and long term perspective plan have been developed and many programs like Bisheswor Among the Poor, Women Income Generating Programme etc were implemented to alleviate the poverty prevalent in rural areas 44% but they couldn't be accomplished because of weak implementing and evaluation management of the project and also not fulfillment the demand guided by policy & strategy from govt. side. As a result in the one hand there is over use and improper use of the available natural resources and other hand some resources are still unused.

Beside these, large numbers of development projects are implemented through NGO's and Government organization to uplift the living standard of people but due to lack of knowledge in planning, evaluation management of the project to the officials; the projects are duplicating and overlapping in one area. A part from these, the govt. devoluted the program like agriculture extension, livestock, primary health and primary education programme to the DDC in the concept of Local Self Governance Act 1999. But it won't be fruitful without sound technical manpower in DDC because of presence of weak project selection criteria, no effective monitoring and evaluation, audit and accounting system. So I am dreaming to re-standerdize planning and evaluation management guidelines to give development vision and make them to be followed effectively. That is why I think we should not do late to gear up a Campaign so that we can generate resources like money and manpower and awareness in the people as well as in the Government.

I am a permanent Staff of this organization as a programme officer since 4 years. I will continue my job in this organization after completion of this course. I will utilize this knowledge acquired there in for improved programme planning, its implementation and quantitative & qualitative evaluation management using statistical tools which will be led by my organization and at the same time I will transfer acquired knowledge to other staffs and people through workshop, seminar and many other concerned training programmes. I think that the new skills and knowledge will be most useful for me to provide expertise to both planning as well as working levels. Which further can be used as good tools to develop the public awareness programme for utilizing the unused human and natural resources. This can be obtained by motivating them to evaluate the ongoing and completed development project and its impact & effect and efficiency & sustainability management. So master's course of development evaluation and management will be really fruitful for my country as well as myself and I promise to return back to my country and serve the people with the acquired knowledge.

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

Anonymous — Wed, 28 Dec 2005 11:43:12 GMT

Hello,

I had come upon your letter while searching the Internet. Although you write beautifully, I do have a couple of comments to make:

* Your letter is a bit long, so people might tend to pass it along and not read it;

* I realize that your Dad's influence in your life, was and is very important, but reading it, it was really just too long and I don't believe that the company that you will be applying for will be interested. You have to talk about what you can do for the company that you are applying for, not what the company can do for you. You have to realize that you are competing with other people so they are not looking for what they can offer the candidate but what the candidate can offer them.

* The last part, you have not mentioned on how they can contact you. What if the cover letter gets lost from the resume?

I hope that you can take my advice with open heart. Good luck...

ask help

Anonymous — Sat, 22 Oct 2005 22:02:30 GMT

hello siberian_girl!

I need urgently a motivation letter in english but I speak very bad this language so I will be very gratefull to you if you accept to send me your motivation letter!

Re: I need a help pls

Siberian_girl — Mon, 27 Jun 2005 14:23:10 GMT

see the post above, please

I need a help pls

Guest — Mon, 27 Jun 2005 10:53:30 GMT

Hello! Dear,

I would be very happy if you could help me in writting a moltivation letter since i wanted to use it in looking for an admission in a post graduate business administration school.

Thanks,
Duchee

Re: We've done it! :)

Siberian_girl — Mon, 09 May 2005 03:57:05 GMT

please write an e-mail to me and I'll answer it, attaching my ML

Re: We've done it! :)

prihy — Fri, 29 Apr 2005 12:02:23 GMT

Dear Siberial girl,

May I see your motivation letter. I really need to write a motivation letter.

Thanks

We've done it! :)

Siberian_girl — Mon, 28 Mar 2005 03:41:49 GMT

With the invaluable help of Mountain Hiker my Motivation Letter has changed significantly. It took 14 (!) overall revisions and very hard work during last 4 days and nights. Now I am very happy with the finished product. If you'd like to see it with your own eyes, please feel free to ask for it via e-mail: a_c_eNOSPAM @ email.it (without "NOSPAM").

P.S.
Once again. Thank you, MH, so much...

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

anon1 — Thu, 24 Mar 2005 18:50:20 GMT

I got your email and replied. You got some homework to do now.

Re: Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

anon1 — Thu, 24 Mar 2005 18:06:57 GMT

SGirl,

Can you please send me your letter by e-mail in MS Word format (preferably) at mountainhikerlotsofspam @ gmail.com and remove the "lotsofspam". The reason for the e-mail and MS Word request is that it is a lot easier to edit and provide comments.

Just some quick comments: your letter seems to lack a strong focus as to what you want to convey. It is more a stream of consciousness. The good news is that you have a strong grasp of English and I think I have a very compelling and interesting story to tell. So now it is just a matter of shaping your letter.

MH

Extremely need your comments to academic motivation letter

Siberian_girl — Thu, 24 Mar 2005 18:01:39 GMT

Dear MountainHiker or somebody,
I have read a lot of different sorts of material on the internet and on this site about writing motivational letters, but it is my first experience. I have revised it, changed it and rewritten it thousand times, I need a fresh look of expert on it. I would be very much grateful if you could help me.

My main problems, as I see them myself, is the length, opening paragraph, language and childish manner... I just wanted to describe myself describing another person and adding some personal aspects of my life, is it a good idea? I am comletely confused. Looking forward any comments.
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Many people say about us âlike father like daughterâ, because I take after him in many ways. We often understand each other without saying a word and our viewpoints on many issues of life coincide. Even though my father has been always very strict to me, much more than my mother, the words he has said, the deeds he has done have been meant to make it better for me. Early in my childhood did I realize my fatherâs extraordinary influence on my life. Despite his long hours at work he always has had time for me. Each time he comes back home after another business trip abroad he brings me some presents and what is more important to me â real stories of other countries, other cultures. Growing up with such a strong role model, I have developed many of his ideas and enthusiasms such as a great desire to study new things, to improve myself, to achieve my goals and never lose heart even during very hard times.

My father started his business during perestroika period. It was not easy for him especially in the beginning when there were neither laws regulating market economy nor any practical experience of running business under market conditions and open economy. At that time my father took the risk of setting up his own business and began privatization of a chemical company producing plastic materials.

He encountered different problems and did all he could to solve them. For example in order to lower the costs he decided to refuse using imported raw materials. He initiated full-scale research process which resulted in obtaining high quality raw material similar to the imported one. During perestroika my father had to invest into new developments as well as diversify his business. Besides producing materials for other industries (refrigerators, TV sets) his company started manufacturing disposable plastic kitchenware, resins, paints, varnishes.

When I was a secondary school pupil I started to realize how hard it was for my father to secure well-being of my brother and me. Since my father had no economic training he had to learn everything himself. He acquired all his skills by trial-and-error method. At that time there were no possibilities to study business accessible to present day energetic young people.

Seeing it all with my own eyes I decided to get training in economy in order to help my father. I learned a lot from him how to be patient, determined, and purposeful. At the age of 13 I was admitted to economics-orientated school on the competitive basis. Of course, in the mid 90s there was no sufficient basis for studying all principles and rules of market activities, so I took up learning English to get an access to foreign information sources, scientific literature and master the complicated subject of business. After finishing school I decided to continue my training in economics and entered International Economics department at the Institute ****.

I have always been interested in the ways business is done in other countries, so having learned English I took up Italian and German. Now I am beginning to study French. Besides, each year I travel to Europe where I take different courses, and communicate with foreigners to strengthen my language abilities.

Foreign languages help me in my work at my fatherâs company. I interpret for him during international exhibitions, translate foreign market reviews and business correspondence. I think my sociability, flexibility, ability to work independently and in a team help me to do my job properly.

My parents have worked so hard for their children that I feel I must do my best to justify their hopes which they lay in me. I want to provide them with all the best conditions for life when they get older. This is the reason number one, why I want to receive good quality European education. In the future I want to apply the obtained knowledge and open and develop my own business in Russia. I am eager to change the current wrong stereotypes in relation to my country. I believe that young, energetic highly skilled and motivated people like me can efficiently contribute to this. We will be able to conduct civilized business, rationally use the rich natural resources of our country, attract internal and external investments for the countryâs development, provide well-being of international level and strengthen economic and cultural relations.

So far I have a lot of energy, great desire for improvement as well as theoretical and practical experience, which is far from sufficient to reach the goals I set before myself.

Another reason of choosing your University is itâs high ratings among American and European universities. The education of such high standards received abroad is highly prestigious in Russia, even more in Siberia Many worldwide well-known business people, economists and politicians graduated from ****. Moreover my foreign friends expressed a lot of very positive opinions on your University teaching staff.

What is also very important for me is the country to stay for the period of studies. I have already been to **** 3 times and every trip increases my enthusiasm for this country. I am very interested in ****an culture and history. I feel comfortable and natural communicating with ****ians and staying in ****. I believe I will easily adapt to new living conditions and social environment, because I lived in an ****ian host family last summer and didnât experience any difficulties or problems.

Fortunately, I have the family that encourages me in everything I do. My plans to study abroad were met enthusiastically by my parents. Full approval and overall assistance of my father will help me to overcome obstacles which might arise in my way. His living example makes me much stronger and more patient. I will do my best in order not to disappoint him.

You might think the story about my father is too detailed and long, but I honestly consider him a great personality who has influenced my life very much.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my application.
I am looking forward to hearing from you in the near future,

Yours faithfully,