http://www.englishforums.com/English/CommunityAnythingNess/Forum6.htmGeneral chit-chat, games, anything that doesn't fit into the other forums.enCSMOD (Build: 3260.39585)http://www.englishforums.com/English/ThesisHypothesis/vpbx/post.htm#24018Sun, 29 Feb 2004 12:19:36 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:24018semie0http://www.englishforums.com/English/ThesisHypothesis/vpbx/post.htm#24018http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments6-24018.xmlI think the problem of your thesis is that you have given out your answer about your thesis question, but you do not provide enough evidence to support your own opinion. You need to tell people your basis of making such a conclusion. My advice is to add some examples and survey results into your thesis to show that your conclusion is based on solid foundation. <br />That's what I think a good thesis should be and only my personal view. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-1.gif" alt="Smile [:)]" /> <br />http://www.englishforums.com/English/ThesisHypothesis/vxqb/post.htmSat, 28 Feb 2004 21:00:39 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:23971Guest1http://www.englishforums.com/English/ThesisHypothesis/vxqb/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments6-23971.xmldo u think my hypthesis is good? how can i make it sound better? is there any stuff i could add that could add a little discussion to it? does it cleary answer my thesis question? <br /> <br />this is my thesis: <br />Is there a relationship between watching violence on T.V and committing violence? <br /> <br />this is my hypothesis: <br /> <br />I strongly believe that TV violence does affect people in committing violence in the outside world. Children, especially, can’t tell the difference between what is real or fiction. Exposure to TV violence increases aggression among children and adults because violence increases excitation. As a result, people who are exposed to TV violence are more prone to committing violence.