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Re: Please assess this essay!

Hookeba — Sun, 17 Jul 2005 03:08:28 GMT

Thank you so much!

I wonder if you can give me some suggestion to correct those mistakes.

Again, thanks a lot!

Re: Please assess this essay!

julielai — Sat, 16 Jul 2005 15:17:12 GMT

Every English learner has their (agreement) own difficulties in learning this language. The difficulties differ from individual to individual. Someone may be in deep trouble of (awkward) using proper words in writing essays while ~~someone~~ others see listening as their major obstacle ~~needed to overcome~~ (redundant). In my opinion, writing seems to be the hardest skill to grasp alongside (if it is alongside, then shouldn't they be equally hard? hmmm) the second hardest one: listening.

First, let consider writing. When I write something in English, usually an essay, my poor vocabulary has limited my ability to express what I actually mean. Sometimes, I donât know the word to depict what I see, hear and feel, or how to write things naturally like an Englishman do (agreement). Using a dictionary is not likely to help much, because if I use any word that I found (tense) in the dictionary, it just leads to a fact that: (wording) my writing or essay is completely weird and become (agreement) nothing other than a mess of strange expressions and irrelevant words. Even when I use an English dictionary, and I have checked the word definition well, ~~but~~ I still find it hard to opt (wording) which words to use accurately. As you know, in English, there are some terms that are ~~fixed to be~~ used only in some contexts, if you express by another way, it just likes baby-writing (what do you mean?). Therefore, writing a paper or an essay are harder than ~~just sitting back,~~ (you're talking as if "sitting back" is an option alongside reading and listening) reading an (agreement) enjoyable books or listening to your favourite English songs. In those case, you adsorb passively what are imparted to you. In contrast, when you write, you need to do brainstorming and create (you coin new words?) your own words and write down your own thoughts. Certainly, this task is required not only ideas ~~to write~~ but also something else: Write ornately (wording) or formally? Which perspectives to stand on? How to arrange ideas well? What point
~~needed~~ to be emphasized or neglected? Even when you use words, terms or expressions approximately (wording), ~~but~~ a poor ideas performance (what do you mean?) or an unfamiliarity of relevant English writing style still leads to failure.

Second, consider (awkward) listening. Because you donât use English as your mother tongue (connect these two sentences). So an unfamiliarity of listening English people talking is no surprise. Moreover, I canât concentrate much when listening, especially listening to a bad English tape or a long and technical conversation. Sometimes, this obstacle stems from other matters (wording). Usually, I hear the words clearly but need a little time to remember what it (agreement) means. Additionally, I pronounce some words inaccurately so when hearing the right pronunciations, I almost canât recognize them. But in my opinion, this problem can be easily dealt with. The key to be successful is very simple: just listen as much as I can and the progress can be by leaps and bounds. This task is a continuing (awkward)one and it does take time to get improved. I need over 2 month to make progress in listening. Now I focus on listening to technical or professional issues. They are far more difficult than just daily conversations.

On the whole, I see writing and listening as the two most difficult skill (agreement) to be made fluent (awkward). Other skills like reading and speaking donât bother me much because Iâm rather confident with those skills.

Please assess this essay!

Hookeba — Sat, 16 Jul 2005 15:01:44 GMT

It's me again!
I found this forum extrememly helpful in order to improve my writing skill. So I decided to post another essay to have you assessed.
Would you mind checking it out ?

Topic : What are your difficulties in English learning?>>

Every English learner has their own difficulties in learning this language. The difficulties differ from individual to individual. Someone may be in deep trouble of using proper words in writing essays while someone see listening as their major obstacle needed to overcome. In my opinion, writing seems to be the hardest skill to grasp alongside the second hardest one: listening.

First, let consider writing. When I write something in English, usually an essay, my poor vocabulary has limited my ability to express what I actually mean. Sometimes, I donât know the word to depict what I see, hear and feel, or how to write things naturally like an Englishman do. Using a dictionary is not likely to help much, because if I use any word that I found in the dictionary, it just leads to a fact that: my writing or essay is completely weird and become nothing other than a mess of strange expressions and irrelevant words. Even I use an English dictionary, and I have checked the word definition well, but I still find it hard to opt which words to use accurately. As you know, in English, there are some terms that are fixed to be used only in some contexts, if you express by another way, it just likes baby-writing. Therefore, writing a paper or an essay are harder than just sitting back, reading an enjoyable books or listening to your favourite English songs. In those case, you adsorb passively what are imparted to you. In contrast, when you write, you need to do brainstorming and create your own words and write down your own thoughts. Certainly, this task is required not only ideas to write but also something else: Write ornately or formally? Which perspectives to stand on? How to arrange ideas well? What point needed to be emphasized or neglected? Even you use words, terms or expressions approximately, but a poor ideas performance or an unfamiliarity of relevant English writing style still leads to failure.

Second, consider listening. Because you donât use English as your mother tongue. So an unfamiliarity of listening English people talking is no surprise. Moreover, I canât concentrate much when listening, especially listening to a bad English tape or long and technical conversation. Sometimes, this obstacle stems from other matters. Usually, I hear the words clearly but need a little time to remember what it means. Additionally, I pronounce some words inaccurately so when hearing the right pronunciations, I almost canât recognize them. But in my opinion, this problem can be easily dealt with. The key to be successful is very simple: just listen as much as I can and the progress can be by leaps and bounds. This task is a continuing one and it does take time to get improved. I need over 2 month to make progress in listening. Now I focus on listening to technical or professional issues. They are far more difficult than just daily conversations.

On the whole, I see writing and listening as the two most difficult skill to be made fluent. Other skills like reading and speaking donât bother me much because Iâm rather confident with those skills.