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Re: My first dairy in English.

Anonymous — Fri, 27 Apr 2007 04:45:47 GMT

As usual, I got up very late today. When I was sleeping, a mobile call waked me up. It's my older colleague Yang. He got a new job days ago. Yang told me about his new job. He felt the work ,not busy and there is plenty of time to learn. After few days he would participate in a big project. For customer requests, the project development team must be on site, so he would work in a new place soon. I asked him whether he would go home in seven days' holiday. He said that he would leave and stay for 3 or 4 days. I invited him to visit my new house and to meet some older colleagues. He promised it. We talked over twenty minutes. After the of the chat, I went to sleep immediately.
At twenty to fourteen, I waked up. I brushed by teeth tooth , washed my face, and then went out to have lunch. In fact, it is breakfast for me. I'm used to have breakfast at this time. When I was back home, it was already fifteen o'clock. I opened my notebook and began to work. A new day was starting!

Re: My first dairy in English.

LeslieYear — Mon, 24 Apr 2006 14:28:26 GMT

Thanks very much! As you said, I will keep it up!

Re: My first dairy in English.

nona the brit — Mon, 24 Apr 2006 11:02:36 GMT

Hi Leslie, keeping a diary is a good idea. Keeping a dairy means you look after cows! Corrections are in italics. You need to practise your verb tenses and also learn about the 24 hour clock (14.00, 15.00) and 'normal' times (2pm, two, 3pm, three) as it is not appropriate to use 24 hour clock in the way that you are trying it. Nice diary though, keep it up! I wish I got to sleep in till 2pm...

As usual, I got up very late today. When I was sleeping, a mobile call woke me up. It's my older colleague Yang. He found a new job days ago. Yang told me about his new job. He felt the work was not busy and there was plenty of time to learn. A few days later, he would participate in a big project. For customer requests, the project development team must be on site, so he would go to work in a new place soon. I asked him whether he would go home fn seven days for a holiday. He said that he would be away for 3 or 4 days. I invited him to visit my new house and meet some older colleagues. He promised that he would. We talked for over twenty minutes. After ending the chat, I went back to sleep immediately.
At twenty to two, I woke up. I washed face and brushed my teeth, then went out to have lunch. In fact, it was breakfast for me. I'm used to having breakfast at this time. When I got back home, it was already three o'clock. I opened my notebook and began to work. A new day was starting!

My first dairy in English.

LeslieYear — Sun, 23 Apr 2006 17:29:55 GMT

I'm not an English speaker. For improving my English skills, I decided to write dairy in English. I hope someone can read my dairy and correct the mistakes in the text. Thanks in advance.

As usual, I got up very late today. When I was sleeping, a mobile call waked me up. It's my older colleague Yang. He found a new job days ago. Yang told me about his new job. He felt the work was not busy and there are plenty of time to learn. A few days later, he would participate in a big project. For customer requests, the project development team must be on site, so he would go to work in a new place soon. I asked him whether would he go home in seven days' holiday. He said that he would leave and stayed for 3 or 4 days. I invited him to visit my new house and met some older colleagues. He promised it. We talked over twenty minutes. After ended the chat, I was going on sleeping immediately.
At twenty to fourteen, I waked up. I washed my tooth and face, then went out to have a lunching. In fact, it should be breakfast for me. I'm used to have breakfast at this time. When I was back home, it was already fifteen o'clock. I opened my notebook and began to work. A new day was starting!