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Re: This text

Diddy — Mon, 12 Jun 2006 11:30:46 GMT

Why do you not take a look at it? I would very much like you to.

Re: This text

Diddy — Thu, 08 Jun 2006 13:32:12 GMT

I have also got this piece of text which I would like you to take a look at.

It could happen.

But to me it just some unfounded postulates. I do not think that Czech Repulic will qualify for the knock out round, I think that Italy will finish first and USA will second in their group and then USA will have to face Brazil, I think that USA will lose that match, and Italy will probaly have to face Croatia, whom I think they will beat.

Re: This text

Diddy — Thu, 08 Jun 2006 13:06:53 GMT

Well the first sentence should have been:

Concerning communication with people, I sometimes experience difficultes.

I hope that is right.

And thank you very much for your very good answer!

Re: This text

YoungCalifornian — Thu, 08 Jun 2006 03:00:22 GMT

Concerning about communicating perfectly with anybody.

That's not a complete sentence, nor is it clear exactly what the meaning is meant to be. It would appear that you are trying to introduce the topic of perfect communication, but that seems unnessesary. If you still feel that it is required, I would first suggest omitting the word "about" as it is very redundant when immediately following the word "concerning". I would also omit "with anybody" (as it is implied in the word communication) and tack the entire phrase onto the beginning of the next sentence. Thus, it would start something like Concerning perfect communication, sometimes there are people... etc

Sometimes there are some (1) people whom I cannot speak to properly (2) even though they are speaking (3) my mother tongue that (4) because they have such a strong accent...

That's a complete sentence in and of itself, and thus should be followed by a period.

(1) I would omit the word "some" as it sounds a bit redundant when it so closely follows "sometimes".

(2) Omit the "to" preceding "properly", and add the word "with" before the word "whom". Also, the way you've stated things makes it sound as if you are the one who cannot speak properly. Rather than saying "speak properly", I suggest "communicate well".

(3) I would change "are speaking" simply to "speak".

(4) Omit the word "that".

...mostly I can understand most (1) of it, but that does not seem to fit perfect (2).

(1) Again, this sounds redundant. I would omit the "mostly".

(2) "Perfect" should instead be "perfectly", as it is an adverb. Still, this whole phrase sounds awkward, and your intended meaning is not clear ...maybe that would be a good phrase to replace it with. I might write something like but the meaning is not always perfectly clear instead.

Overall I would rewrite the whole thing to read like this:

I find that sometimes there are people with whom I cannot communicate well, even they though they speak my mother tongue, because they have such a strong accent. I can understand most of what they say, but the meaning is not always perfectly clear.

This text

Diddy — Wed, 07 Jun 2006 19:24:48 GMT

I would be very happy if anybody would take a glance at this text and correct any mistakes that they might find,

Concerning about communicating perfectly with anybody. Sometimes there are some people whom I cannot speak to properly even though they are speaking my mother tongue that because they have such a strong accent, mostly I can understand most of it, but that does not seem to fit perfect.

Thanks!