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Re: Sentences

deanpijin — Fri, 08 Sep 2006 06:52:09 GMT

Thanks Clive for your comments.

Regards,

Dean

Re: Sentences

Clive — Fri, 08 Sep 2006 05:43:56 GMT

Hi,

Medicines information is an important pillar of newly developed Malaysian medicines policy which is still not fully implemented. A study on the quality of information in pharmaceutical advertisements in medical journal in Malaysia would provide important information for monitoring the progress of the Malaysian medicines policy as regards of medicines information.

Medicines information is an important pillar of a newly developed Malaysian medicines policy which is still not fully implemented. A study on the quality of information in pharmaceutical advertisements in medical journals in Malaysia would provide important information for monitoring the progress of the Malaysian medicines policy.

The phrase 'medicines information' ( and 'medicines policy') is rather awkward. Can you perhaps say 'information about medicines'? In fact, can you talk about 'drugs' rather than 'medicines'?

Best wishes, Clive

Sentences

deanpijin — Fri, 08 Sep 2006 04:56:39 GMT

Hi all,

Would somebody please help me with my sentences?

Regards,
Dean