http://www.englishforums.com/English/EslEssayWritingWorld/Forum9.htmPost your essay, short story or composition here. Review, comment or just read for fun.enCSMOD (Build: 3260.39585)http://www.englishforums.com/English/Correct/dnmvg/post.htm#317974Sun, 21 Jan 2007 12:47:05 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:317974Feebs110http://www.englishforums.com/English/Correct/dnmvg/post.htm#317974http://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-317974.xml<BLOCKQUOTE><table width="85%"><tr><td class="txt4"><img src="/Themes/default/images/icon-quote.gif">&nbsp;<strong>Cheese1987 wrote:</strong></td></tr><tr><td class="quoteTable"><table width="100%"><tr><td width="100%" valign="top" class="txt4"><p>Hello everybody, I’m Shirley. I am a quiet person <font color="#ff0000">that</font><font color="#0000ff"> </font><font color="#ff0000">I&nbsp; </font><font color="#0000ff">[who enjoys OR and I ]&nbsp;</font><font color="#ff0000"></font> enjoy staying at home in my leisure time. I enjoy playing with my pets. Actually, I have four cats and a dog, all of whom are lovely and unique. So I never feel bored when I stay at home. Also, I enjoy reading <font color="#ff0000">book <font color="#0000ff">[either plural "books" or singular "a book"]</font>.</font> ”Pride and Prejudice” is my favorite novel <font color="#ff0000">that</font> <font color="#0000ff">[and] </font>I <font color="#ff0000">had</font><font color="#0000ff"> [have] </font>read it <strike><font color="#ff0000">by</font></strike> several times. </p> <p><br>To be honest, my English level is low. However, as we all know<font color="#ff0000">,</font> English is essential in our worl<font color="#ff0000">d. , no matter for&nbsp; </font><font color="#0000ff">[, both for] </font>your further study or your future career. Thus I need to improve it by <font color="#0000ff">[making]</font> a great effort. Furthermore, I will&nbsp;sit&nbsp;for&nbsp;the Use of English examination in the coming April. I hope that I <font color="#ff0000">can have</font> <font color="#0000ff">[will have]</font> a satisfactory result in it. <br></p> <p><font color="#a52a2a">This is my friend's composition.</font></p> <p><font color="#a52a2a">Please help me to correct it~~thanks~</font></p></td></tr></table></td></tr></table></BLOCKQUOTE><div style="clear:both;"></div>http://www.englishforums.com/English/Correct/dnmdz/post.htmSun, 21 Jan 2007 11:36:29 GMT946f00bb-57d3-4b7b-a9a2-059b5341af52:317956Cheese19871http://www.englishforums.com/English/Correct/dnmdz/post.htmhttp://www.englishforums.com/English/comments9-317956.xml<P>Hello everybody, I’m Shirley. I am a quiet person that I enjoy staying at home in my leisure time. I enjoy playing with my pets. Actually, I have four cats and a dog, all of whom are lovely and unique. So I never feel bored when I stay at home. Also, I enjoy reading book. ”Pride and Prejudice” is my favorite novel that I had read it by several times. </P> <P><BR>To be honest, my English level is low. However, as we all know English is essential in our world. , no matter for your further study or your future career. Thus I need to improve it by a great effort. Furthermore, I will&nbsp;sit&nbsp;for&nbsp;the Use of English examination in the coming April. I hope that I can have a satisfactory result in it. <BR></P> <P><FONT color=#a52a2a>This is my friend's composition.</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#a52a2a>Please help me to correct it~~thanks~</FONT></P><div style="clear:both;"></div>