Re: proofread my speech!

julielai — Fri, 27 Apr 2007 01:58:23 GMT

Took a look at a couple of paragraphs. I suggest you rewrite some of your sentences so they don't start with an ambiguous "it".

e.g. It will not have a title bar but it will have a exit bottom on the interface.
How about: No title bar will be available on xyz, but an "exit" buttom will be provided on the interface. (something like that)

Ruriko wrote:
Hi can anyone proofread my speech?

Background/Concept

MMORPG stands for massive multiplayer online role-playing game (you need a pause here) it is a type of game genre. MMORPGs are online role-playing multiplayer games which allow thousands of gamers to play in the game's evolving virtual world at the same time via the Internet.

My objective to (wrong prep) this project is to create a informative CD-Rom that should allow new users to have some indepth (sp.) experience of the game "Trickster Online".

Content (including multimedia elements)

It (what is it?) will have about 14 pages or more. Almost every page will have images but I will try not to flood it with pictures. It contains 2 interfaces. One is the home page and the other one is when you click on one of the sections it will have it's own layout. It will contain a video clip and it's a trailer but it's in Korean so If I can find someone who knows Korean I might be able to translate it (what is it?) (from what to what). The video clip is in a AVI format. I don't have a powerful computer to capture the game, so I decided to download the video clip from the official site. It will contain some music.

proofread my speech!

Ruriko — Wed, 25 Apr 2007 12:16:13 GMT

Hi can anyone proofread my speech?

Background/Concept

My project is going to be on Trickster Online. Trickster Online is a MMORPG. MMORPG stands for massive multiplayer online role-playing game it is a type of game genre. MMORPGs are online role-playing multiplayer games which allow thousands of gamers to play in the game's evolving virtual world at the same time via the Internet.

My objective to this project is to create a informative CD-Rom that should allow new users to have some indepth experience of the game "Trickster Online".

Content (including multimedia elements)

It will have about 14 pages or more. Almost every page will have images but I will try not to flood it with pictures. It contains 2 interfaces. One is the home page and the other one is when you click on one of the sections it will have it's own layout. It will contain a video clip and it's a trailer but it's in Korean so If I can find someone who knows Korean I might be able to translate it. The video clip is in a AVI format. I don't have a powerful computer to capture the game so I decided to download the video clip from the official site. It will contain some music.

Interactive Elements

The navigation will have a rollover effect. I'll be adding a sound control bar at the bottom of the interface so the user can freely disable the music whenever he/she wants. It will have some animations in some pages. It will also have a puppet transitions.

Platform

My target audience is target to age 10 and up. I plan to make it able to run on a slow computer. I also hope most users have a CD drive at the speed of 52x or else it would run a bit slow. The resolution will be 1024 by 768 so it should be full screen. It will not have a title bar but it will have a exit bottom on the interface.

ESL Essay, Writing World

Re: proofread my speech!

proofread my speech!